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Why do my tears fall like heavy rain,
Why does my heart weep for your sorrow,
Why should I weep for hurting you,
I long to feel your skin against mine,
And to feel your hot lips on mine,
Let me tell you I am sorry,
And let me hold you once more,
To feel your heart against my chest,
Your warm lips on my neck,
Let me have you back in my arms,
Please forgive this sorrow heart,
And take me back in your arms,
One last time.
It's touching, and short to the point. I would've liked if there was more emphasis on the love part, but it's great as it is. Keep it up ;)
awwwwww OMG thats like soo sweet who ever the lucky girl is she most diff take you beack after that ^___^
...lucky guy u mean? some ppl told me it made them think of sex!Quote:
awwwwww OMG thats like soo sweet who ever the lucky girl is she most diff take you beack after that ^___^
:rolleyes: Well it does give out a lust feeling. ;) But no harm done xD
oo he's a guy. I hope he'll hear you :) The font could be changed to a brighter colour. It's hard to read with the dark bg. There was a typo-
Try editing it ^^ Nice job btw.Quote:
Why dose my heart weep for your sorrow,
Lusty @.@ nice poem... full of.. sheesh imagination :x @.@ ahhh~!! ~.~ @.@
sheesh...
hmmm @.@ NiCe~!Quote:
To feel your heart against my chest,
Your warm lips on my neck,
is it bad to have imagination?Quote:
Lusty @.@ nice poem... full of.. sheesh imagination :x @.@ ahhh~!! ~.~ @.@
sheesh...
i will admit i am not the best speller!Quote:
Well it does give out a lust feeling. But no harm done xD
oo he's a guy. I hope he'll hear you The font could be changed to a brighter colour. It's hard to read with the dark bg. There was a typo-
nice poem indeed.. most might think its about sex because
of the term u've used but its not so bad..
try to elaborate more of your feelings, expand your imaginations..
aside from that, it is great! keep it up!