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    Spectrum of lights

    I see a spectrum of lights
    I cant understand why
    People say that
    When they die
    They see a
    White light
    So why
    Do I see
    A spectrum of lights

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    Re: Spectrum of lights

    sorry that was my bad/wont happen agian
    by the way nice

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    Re: Spectrum of lights

    yeah guys i know it freakin sucks but i wrote it for i free write and this is all that came to my mind when they announced the topic was Spectrum

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    Re: Spectrum of lights

    Nah, it doesnt suck, but it can be improvemed. It looks too sipmly put together. I see that you free writed it, but it also looks like you rushed it. If you would just relax and let your mind really flow on it, it can be a lot better. But the poem is still good none the less.

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    Re: Spectrum of lights

    thanks

    yeah it was rush cause we had a deadline and i dont have internet at home anymore yet

    so yeah thanks tho

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    Re: Spectrum of lights

    Well it's a little short but it's good and it's something that most people have heard about ^^

    This is where Achmed would say: I saw flying car parts ^^ lol

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