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    Spineless Freak

    Wind blows gently in my ear,
    As I sit on this cold park bench.
    Trying to conceal this pain,
    Deciphering what happened.
    Why you were with her,
    Was hurting me not good enough?
    You had to stab me deeper.
    By getting close to my best friend,
    Almost breaking our friendship.
    Tearing me apart,
    Unable to know who really support me.
    Taking all that I had,
    Leaving me to rot and die painfully.
    You spineless freak, how could you?
    I can never forgive you so don't ask,
    In fact stay away, far away.
    Pray I never see you again,
    As it will be the last time you live.
    So goodbye forever, its over for good,
    I've been great without you, so don't run back.
    I'm happier than ever,
    No longer getting hurt by you.
    I've a new reason to live,
    I feel like I'm floating on air.
    So leave me alone,
    Reflect on what you did.
    May it eat you up inside,
    Knowing you almost killed me.
    To me your as good as dead,
    Just a distant dot on the horizon.
    With the wind in my hair,
    An air of peace is all around.
    Satisfied that period of life is over,
    No longer tormented with pain.
    But stronger than before,
    After gathering my strength.
    Being able to find something new,
    To live for instead of a life spent with you.



    This is a poem about my past and It felt good to let it all out. It may not make sense in places so please comment.
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    Re: Spineless Freak

    I am speechless.....this poem is written so good that I can just envision the whole scene in my head......
    Amazing!!!
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    Re: Spineless Freak

    Thank you for your comment. Its nice to know that people can feel like they are there within the poem. Helps me think about how to set the poem up and what I really want it to achieve, which by the looks of it, it has done so.
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    Re: Spineless Freak

    This is quite emotional put simply. I don't feel that this earns an award, but you did manage to put through what you were feeling while writing this. This doesn't feel empty at all, but filled with some hatred, some sadness and a pinch of despair. There is a trace of hope, but so sparse that I barely dare to take note of it.

    Saying all this about someone (in the poem) is partially attacking and aggressing in my personal opinion. But it does have a sound of poetry to it. I'll stick with the word "striking" for now. It can also be a feeling of releasing everything and not looking back. This little text can have many meanings actually depending on who reads it. Open people will see poetry, involved people might feel attaqued, indifferent people might just see lots of nice words put together. That's about all I "feel" for now, so I hope your feeling positive now that all this is written down and have moved on to nicer thoughts
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    Re: Spineless Freak

    Yes I have moved on far from this as I no longer have the need to keep dwelling on my past but look to a promising future instead.

    Thank you for your comment soldat, I am sorry for all the aggression within the poem but its what I felt as I started writing it.
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