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    Ssssss

    Secrets.
    Several spread.
    Slither so strongly.
    Surrounding shells of souls said to somehow save.

    Stop.
    Sorely succumbing.
    She sees salvation.
    Secrets shared, solidify segments of sorrow shed.

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    Re: Ssssss

    wow i havnt seen a poem that could be a
    toung twister before very nicely done, and
    secrets can be a real mess too i have had
    a few myself and i still hold a few secrets...
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Ssssss

    Nice use of alliteration! It was very well done, Peach. I really liked it!
    I'm standing in the dark calling your name, But when you don't answer,
    I realized everyday it's the same.

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    Re: Ssssss

    Once again you made expert use of the killing line, that is very hard to do but you manage to create a magnificent line in some of your poems that really stands out. And that last line is it. I loved it. Abecedarian I always felt was hard enough to spell let alone write. This is the first current one I have read.

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