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    Stage

    Stage

    A ballerina performing her dance
    Looking statuesque in that stance
    Fluid movements captured by her feet
    Draws in amazement from the seats

    Rhythm flowed within her heart
    Making it impossible for any eyes to part
    Looking at the grace that exceeds almost all
    She outperforms everyone in the hall

    Each step and swirl in precise detail
    Catching the attention of every male
    With that smile that dazzled the crowd
    Lowering herself, she then bowed

    Applauds followed with screams of cheers
    She was overjoyed with streaks of tears
    The roses spread neatly across beneath
    As we heard the ending of the guitar riff

    She whispered her silent prayer to god
    For the strength to break free, she thanked lord
    Too long was she held within her cage
    Till she found salvation and refuge on stage

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    Re: Stage

    I liked this poem but I have a question
    Was she scared of being on stage...was she happy she did not suck at dancing... Why was she so happy that she cried?
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    Re: Stage

    Well, it says that she's "overjoyed"(4th stanza,2nd line), so well that's why she cried. >.> Maybe that line was a bit weird, I admit.. I used it cuz "tears" rhymed with "cheers" xD But thx for the comments guys ^^

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    Re: Stage

    by reading this am actually able to see the ballerina on stage crying and receiving applauses (thats a good thing )

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    Re: Stage

    your poem is really sweet^^ great descriptive words too^^ i enjoyed reading it

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