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    Start to feel whole.

    Heart beat racing as the tingle hits my lips
    As your heart tells me this is where I belong
    And your long fingers tenderly grip my hips.

    The tip of your tongue lilting along mine
    Our hearts beating two at one time
    the whole experience so sublime

    Teasing in a dace of loving tenderness
    All love and romance ensures I'll forever remember this.
    The touch and taste, this feeling has my head reeling

    Eyes full of big stars, and stomach full of butterflies
    I try so hard to hide but my body always reveals the lie
    Kisses like lightning make this all so frightning

    Words so elegantly crafted can be so unreliable
    Because true meaning is so easily deniable
    But the truth he wants so bad is easily found in touch.
    Surely soon it will be too much.

    The yearning arch of my hips, the trail of my fingertips
    Tracing your spine while yo whisper to me "Your mine"
    Loving and tenderly against my ear.

    I tremble and ache to be held more near
    Those words exactly what I needed to hear
    To be able to surrender all my hurt and pain
    To start to feel whole again.

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    Re: Start to feel whole.

    This is beautiful. I love it. I hope to see more! ^_^


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    Thanks. ^.^ I'm glad someone appriciates it. Made me kinda emberassed. Where'd that bashfulness come from?!

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    Re: Start to feel whole.

    I like this quite well... Such emotion and passion in it... wonderful work!!!!!!!!
    As well as you've perfectly managed to show what it is like to feel whole...
    Well, I think this is a great work and I'll be waiting forward for more!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Start to feel whole.

    Wooo thank you! I'm glad you REALLY got the feeling behind this. Honestly a lot of the people I had read it, got it. But thought all physical about it. And I was afraid it'd just like...sex! And that's not the point of this. I'm glad you got it.

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