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    Starting From Scratch

    If I could start from scratch,
    I wouldn't change much a thing
    I'd still have my middle name on that ring,
    I'd still enjoy watching the rain and sing.
    My friends wouldn't change
    Brian David, and still chill with Rey.
    I'd fix my mistakes...
    do what ever it takes.
    Make sure I never get caught
    for helpin that little kid.
    I woulda made sure to show my face,
    but instead I ran to a wall and hid.
    Make sure I don't go off and make haste
    of slow decisions.
    I'd enjoy my childhood,
    my grandmother,
    cherish our moments together.
    The renegade was forgotten,
    the outcast was cast aside,
    and the soulja lost in war....
    But luckily,
    a dream never dies.
    Its just misplaced with lies,
    or forgotten,
    but when remembered
    its hard to put it to sleep
    it won't stay in the dirt,
    it is something that you can't hurt.
    Cuz, I'ma m0th6rf*ck!n Renegade
    The outcast, the deuce os spades
    and its true.
    I'm a soulja
    and everywhere I see a soulja, a soulja
    everywhere I see a soulja....
    like me.
    You should stop talking about your dreams, and start making them.

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    Re: Starting From Scratch

    STANZAS. You know what I want from you.
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    Re: Starting From Scratch

    I would suggest you to write your poems in stanzas of at least 4 lines each. It was a great poem though.

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    Re: Starting From Scratch

    I don't really think you NEED stanzas to have a great poem, because i think this one was good like it was. Stanzas are good, but I liked! Keep rollin, soulja.
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    Re: Starting From Scratch

    Quote Originally Posted by Sincere
    I don't really think you NEED stanzas to have a great poem, because i think this one was good like it was. Stanzas are good, but I liked! Keep rollin, soulja.
    lol it is true, but a for a poem to be at leats prefect it needs stanzas.

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