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    State of being.

    Here I sit--alone.
    It's dark and quiet here.
    There's no sunshine,
    no happy little trees.
    I can see the world outside,
    but the world can't see me.

    Here I stand--patiently.
    Looking for a sign.
    A sign that says that I am
    loved, pointing to the one
    who will be mine.

    Here I am--empty.
    A hollow shell of a man.
    On the search for someone
    to make me whole.
    I wander aimlessly
    across this land.

    *It's not my best work, but I tried.*


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    Re: State of being.

    I like it, but I agree that you have better!!! It's so sad and so true...
    I really enjoyed reading it!!!! And I'll be waiting forward to the next ones...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: State of being.

    it has good meaning but i think there could have been more detail and length.other than that this poem is great.gj!
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    Re: State of being.

    That is so TRUE!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This poem speaks the truth with the sadness!!!! I love it so I hope to see more in the future!!!!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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