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    Stay away.

    I don't wanna hurt no one
    All those things out of my head
    I don't care of what you say
    I want you to hear of what I said.

    Told you to stay away from me
    Am going back to darkness
    there I will stay
    Completely harmless

    I place everything on you
    You are the one to blame
    I never wanted this
    Put you in shame

    You cause me so much pain
    Too many wounds to heal
    So much blood
    I want you to feel.

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    Re: Stay away.

    Very intresting poem. I do know I have thoughs feeling when I want someone to leave me alone. This poem sounds like they are trying to push someone away. So that they can stand on their own feet. Very good poem.

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    Re: Stay away.

    *looks around* why are so little comments here? O.o A bad day for poem readers again?

    This is cool, has lots of emotion in it... Lots of anger and sadness... It really seems just too sad for me to see someone who pushes away someone else like this and preferes to live "in darkness"... please don't do that, though I understand...

    It was nice to read this and remember how it feels to break up and stuff...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Stay away.

    i love it very cool but just like your new poem you need to watch out for gramatical mistakes those can make a good poem bad in a heartbeat

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    Re: Stay away.

    LOL thanks you guys, I'll be sure "NOT" to make any grammer mistakes, and this is a poem, nothing like in real life.

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    Re: Stay away.

    Interesting. I really like this. THe rhyming and or flow of this was a little rocky. But I liked the feeling and the wording a lot. Congrats. <3

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