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    steppin up god of death style*

    steppin up
    here we go again around this merry go round of life.
    this time im steppin up, this time im putting up a fight
    aint no more being knocked around or being down
    im steppin up, its going to be one hell of a throw down

    sidestep, upper cut if i must
    im a man of my word and im steppin up
    no more given up, it wasnt my style anyhow
    forget about what you knew, im not the same as the fool that used to play the game
    this time i got fame from my writings,
    im steppin up against the odds, takin all the nods and knocks they throw at me

    this is my game now, and ill stare you all down
    steppin up and stompin you down its all about the power i bring today
    this time im steppin up, aint no more quitting, aint no more running away
    im steppin up
    I am the God Of Death, Reaper of the souls, hunter of the darkness......
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    Re: steppin up god of death style*

    Atleast a bit of capitalization or punctuation is all that I think would make poems more intelligent. It certainly isnt necessary to make a poem good. But there's something this poem is missing, IMO. It lacks a certain "umpf". It could be that it sounds like every other poem that tries to sound hard..
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    Re: steppin up god of death style*

    really? wow, this is the first time that alot of my work has been critized... im not complaining, i really think that some of my work needs improvements.
    sorry about not capiltilzing(sp) or spelling. i have a disorder that makes me rush things and never see things all the way through
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