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    Strangers

    Sometimes we forget
    Of who we really are
    We just look at our feet
    Wondering really far

    We take a look at each other
    Looking in their faces
    We think of them as brother or sister
    Only from different places

    Hardly know them
    Always forgetting their name
    Looking at another person
    Its just the same

    Meeting other strangers
    Only want to be a friend
    When they are gone
    They'll be there to the end.

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    Re: Strangers

    ya kinda confused me at the end but it was a great poem overall. it actually expresses how people think when they see or meet a person, well i thought so anyway. great work!!

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    Re: Strangers

    The poem gave me the warm feeling of friendship. It is very true about meeting other people and wanting to be firends (That's how it all starts). Now in the end, it had confuse me too...did you mean that when they go...they'll still be there in that person memories or no? Please clear that up for us. Overall, it had a nice flow with the ryhming and the lines itself. I would give it a 9/10. Keep it up, I would love to see more.

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    Re: Strangers

    Nice poem, Hell knight ... ^^ I would like to see more of your poetry ... ^^
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    Re: Strangers

    Well... it made me think about the fact that I sometimes walk the street, looking at my feet, not notesing what's happening around, not noticing or recognising my friends, my classmates... That I haven't seen my friends from my last school for ages and have forgotten almost everything about them and how sad it all is...
    This poem helps to open your eyes... Very nice!

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    Re: Strangers

    Thank you all for this awesome comments lol and I really appreciated them too. and I'll be happy to write more for you.

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    Re: Strangers

    Yes the last line was a bit confusing. Hopefully you can shed some light about it. I thought this poem was very meaningful. It reminds me of the online friends I have, how they connect to me. Overall, it was a nice read

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    Re: Strangers

    I know I know, but am trying my best to get this better lol, but I'll do better on my next one.

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