UHHH not exatly sure about some parts, its not that they suck its just that i dont understand them. im pretty sure your poem is good, im just not the greatest judger lol
piles up like papers
on a procrastinator's desk;
Making the individual twitch with anxiety.
So mischievious and sneaky,
like a fox
it creeps up behind its prey,
taking it offguard.
An uneasy feeling it is.
Like an unsteady boat being teased
by an angry sea.
Looking at a mountain he's destined to climb;
Stress is the thunderstorm awaiting his prescence.
Like time on a broken clock, it makes you wonder.
It plays with your mind.
Stress is the light at the end of the tunnel
that you know you cannot reach.
I say to you.
Don't let your mind succumb to its curse.
To its wickedness.
Take it in, if not, let it out.
Let it be the milk to your cereal.
Let it be the icing on your cake.
You can climb that mountain!
Those clouds will fade away.
That fire will be extinguished.
Like turbulance on a plane,
it is just another bump in your
An ecstasy available to you and me -
Can be surpassed.
Last edited by The White Wolf; Mar 23, 2007 at 08:57 PM.
It's all right, spin. Thank you for reading it though. I'm sorry you couldn't understand some parts of it. I thought it was put out very bluntly. But then again, I am the one who wrote the poem, so I wouldn't know. I've never written a poem like this either. So, I'd be confused if I were in a position such as yourself, lol.
I got the jist of it and thought it was quite good. I liked the similies............or are they metaphors..................I'm not good at poetry terminology, lol. Either way, I liked it. .
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Because they have obtained that level they are arrogant. You have to kep in mind when you talk about these guys they are kind of dorks who probably didn't excel at much and this is their only outlet to flex their muscles. Their egos would suffer no less so the the forum suffers some more. Watch one way or another they will probably repond to this post with a threat. But there are better forums out there. Private messege Zev.
Thank you, deo-chan. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Most of them were similes.
Who knew stress could be like that? Very good poem and I look forward to reading your next one.
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Thank you CherryBlossom. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll post another one soon.
Hmm nice poem again~! good work.. u have a nice imagination lol
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