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    Stupid Butterflies

    no more butterflies, no more fears
    no more sighs, and no more tears
    It's time to try to be brave
    and make my heart finally behave
    no more wanting what I can't get
    my thought he will not intersect
    the name and face I will erase
    nothing for him my heart will incase
    i will tear him apart from my heart
    and try a brand new start
    the cracks in my heart will heal
    the gashes will eventually seal
    my heart will no longer be torn
    the heavy chains around it no longer worn
    i will be free, my heart will be light
    this is what i truly want with all of my might.

    well i just made this one and i don't know if its good or not. what do you guys think?
    every rose has a thorn

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    Re: Stupid Butterflies

    That was really good sangogirl...I can truly understand what you were feeling and wanting to say, can't wait to hear more keep up the good work

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    Re: Stupid Butterflies

    i like the rhyming, very nice...
    although the title dont seem to fit
    your poem.. but it took my attention.. heheh..

    aside from that, it is really nice.
    good job buddy!

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    Re: Stupid Butterflies

    agreed abt the rhyming.. its nice.. and the poem is nicely written as well ^^
    Hmm...if u break into stanza's...it'll be easier to read though.. ^^

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    Re: Stupid Butterflies

    i like the fact that your peom as alot of feeling
    and very with rhymes as well
    you did a verey good job and hope to read more from you
    keep up the good work okay

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    Re: Stupid Butterflies

    thanks. i really didn't know what to put as a title i always leave that last. i wasn't sure if it was good, cause i just wrote it out of stupid feelings. you know how you feel when you really like someone but they don't like you and your trying to get over them, but it's kinda hard? well that's kinda what i was trying to communicate through the poem.
    every rose has a thorn

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