Stupid Littel Girl

just_an_awful_dream · May 18, 2006, 04:32 PM

Stupid Littel Girl

Listen to him Speak.
Try to drown it out.
Tell him you can't take it.
Now he begins to shout.

Tell him goodnight daddy.
I can't take this shit.
He rises to his feet.
Now his eye are lit.

Run up the stairs.
lock the door.
You try to cry.
Your heart is sore.

Do it you stupid littel girl.
It won't change how he feels in the end.
You Know you want to.
You can trust me; I'm your only friend.

Now would you be on your knees,
Screamig Lord please,
If it wasn't really him?
No.
So cry.

You force yourself to cry in the worst wat.
It hurts.
Wipe the blood away and close your eyes.
It's all over now, you stupid littel Girl.

His touch gives you the chills.
So push him off.
You can't tell,
And it kills.

He loves his knife.
So sleep with one eye open.
This is your life.
Don't let it end like this.

Do it agen you stupid little girl.
Don't you wanna cry?
No ones watching, here's your chance.
Come no, just try.

Now would you be on your knees,
Screaming Lord please,
If it wasn't really him?
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i can't speell...wate no i ment spell damn it

*ketaro* · May 18, 2006, 04:57 PM

wow that was dark man, it was good though, keep it up man.

just_an_awful_dream · May 18, 2006, 05:11 PM

thanks .... im um....happy you replyed

Vontech · May 18, 2006, 07:22 PM

Your poem is pretty good and dark.
But the fouth paragraph didn't make much since to me.
But keep it up. You also spelled some of the words wrong.

Exoparadapsyphobia · May 18, 2006, 07:33 PM

Wow, that poem was really impressive. What is the situation in that poem? I know it's some kind of abuse between a father and daughter but what exactly is going on?

*Juice* · May 18, 2006, 07:58 PM

hmmmmm, for some reason i like it. dont quite get the situation but its good

LostDemon102 · May 19, 2006, 10:49 AM

Not only did it catch my attention but it impressed me~! ^^

It was dark yet good. It's better than mine! T_T

Hehe~!

Well, keep up the good work~! ^^

Bye~!

just_an_awful_dream · May 19, 2006, 04:44 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Vontech

Your poem is pretty good and dark.
But the fouth paragraph didn't make much since to me.
But keep it up. You also spelled some of the words wrong.

the voices in her head are talking to her (the devil)
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Quote:

Originally Posted by LostDemon102

Not only did it catch my attention but it impressed me~! ^^

It was dark yet good. It's better than mine! T_T

Hehe~!

Well, keep up the good work~! ^^

Bye~!

thanks that realy helps.
i doubt that it is better them yours.

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eMAD · May 20, 2006, 10:58 AM

waw ! ..i like that type of words ...hmm .. ...living in the shadows ..

just_an_awful_dream · May 20, 2006, 04:00 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by eMAD

waw ! ..i like that type of words ...hmm .. ...living in the shadows ..

you sound just as happy as me. lol

Clow Sakura · May 20, 2006, 04:06 PM

It was dark and cool but you spelt little and screaming and lots more wrong

May 18, 2006, 04:32 PM	#1 (permalink)
just_an_awful_dream Newbie Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 27 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Stupid Littel Girl Stupid Littel Girl Listen to him Speak. Try to drown it out. Tell him you can't take it. Now he begins to shout. Tell him goodnight daddy. I can't take this shit. He rises to his feet. Now his eye are lit. Run up the stairs. lock the door. You try to cry. Your heart is sore. Do it you stupid littel girl. It won't change how he feels in the end. You Know you want to. You can trust me; I'm your only friend. Now would you be on your knees, Screamig Lord please, If it wasn't really him? No. So cry. You force yourself to cry in the worst wat. It hurts. Wipe the blood away and close your eyes. It's all over now, you stupid littel Girl. His touch gives you the chills. So push him off. You can't tell, And it kills. He loves his knife. So sleep with one eye open. This is your life. Don't let it end like this. Do it agen you stupid little girl. Don't you wanna cry? No ones watching, here's your chance. Come no, just try. Now would you be on your knees, Screaming Lord please, If it wasn't really him? -----------------------------Double Post Merge--------------------------------------------- i can't speell...wate no i ment spell damn it Last edited by just_an_awful_dream; May 18, 2006 at 04:45 PM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost
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