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    Stupid Littel Girl

    Stupid Littel Girl


    Listen to him Speak.
    Try to drown it out.
    Tell him you can't take it.
    Now he begins to shout.

    Tell him goodnight daddy.
    I can't take this shit.
    He rises to his feet.
    Now his eye are lit.

    Run up the stairs.
    lock the door.
    You try to cry.
    Your heart is sore.

    Do it you stupid littel girl.
    It won't change how he feels in the end.
    You Know you want to.
    You can trust me; I'm your only friend.

    Now would you be on your knees,
    Screamig Lord please,
    If it wasn't really him?
    No.
    So cry.

    You force yourself to cry in the worst wat.
    It hurts.
    Wipe the blood away and close your eyes.
    It's all over now, you stupid littel Girl.

    His touch gives you the chills.
    So push him off.
    You can't tell,
    And it kills.

    He loves his knife.
    So sleep with one eye open.
    This is your life.
    Don't let it end like this.

    Do it agen you stupid little girl.
    Don't you wanna cry?
    No ones watching, here's your chance.
    Come no, just try.

    Now would you be on your knees,
    Screaming Lord please,
    If it wasn't really him?
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    i can't speell...wate no i ment spell damn it
    Last edited by just_an_awful_dream; May 18, 2006 at 04:45 PM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost

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    Re: Stupid Littel Girl

    wow that was dark man, it was good though, keep it up man.

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    Re: Stupid Littel Girl

    thanks .... im um....happy you replyed

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    Re: Stupid Littel Girl

    Your poem is pretty good and dark.
    But the fouth paragraph didn't make much since to me.
    But keep it up. You also spelled some of the words wrong.

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    Re: Stupid Littel Girl

    Wow, that poem was really impressive. What is the situation in that poem? I know it's some kind of abuse between a father and daughter but what exactly is going on?
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    Re: Stupid Littel Girl

    hmmmmm, for some reason i like it. dont quite get the situation but its good

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    Re: Stupid Littel Girl

    Not only did it catch my attention but it impressed me~! ^^

    It was dark yet good. It's better than mine! T_T

    Hehe~! Well, keep up the good work~! ^^

    Bye~!

    I do, I care for you because I can. I can because I want to. And I want to... because you said that I couldn't...
    Yet... Who... would love a demon like me...?


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    Re: Stupid Littel Girl

    Quote Originally Posted by Vontech
    Your poem is pretty good and dark.
    But the fouth paragraph didn't make much since to me.
    But keep it up. You also spelled some of the words wrong.

    the voices in her head are talking to her (the devil)
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    Quote Originally Posted by LostDemon102
    Not only did it catch my attention but it impressed me~! ^^

    It was dark yet good. It's better than mine! T_T

    Hehe~! Well, keep up the good work~! ^^

    Bye~!

    thanks that realy helps.
    i doubt that it is better them yours.
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    Last edited by just_an_awful_dream; May 19, 2006 at 07:28 PM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost

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