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    A Suffering Prisoner

    Where am I heading now?
    Death maybe my only path
    Never again do I want to feel this way

    I can't; this is too much
    Rather or not I say stop
    Why is this happening to me?
    Why am I the only who has to take this suffering?
    Does anyone care?

    Please set me free
    I'm begging on my knees
    The chains seemed to have tightened
    Looks like I'm a slave for a life time

    The darkness seemed to hold me in a cold embrace
    There is only the smallest peek of light
    I'm too trapped to reach out
    Nothing seems abled to break through these barriers

    Is my hope gone?!
    Why can't I stop these tears from falling?
    Why I ask
    Help is what I plead
    ♥ (¯'·._.·[GEISHA ゲイシャ]·._.·'¯) ♥

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    Re: A Suffering Prisoner

    WOW thats sooo deep and depresing
    I like it keep up the good work
    hope to read more

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    Re: A Suffering Prisoner

    Whoa I really like this! Well done its a real good poem!

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    Re: A Suffering Prisoner

    Thanks. I'm hoping to get more comments
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    Re: A Suffering Prisoner

    I hope you didn't really mean that, but I still Love it.

    I live in the shadows and I am as fast as the speed of light, but I use my ability's to help people even though they fear me for who I am.

    A Brand new Theme song for all my friends who use to come to Ao and the People that still come's to Ao.
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    Re: A Suffering Prisoner

    This gives me an idea.
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    Re: A Suffering Prisoner

    Ugh cliche! It's a good poem, quite well written but it's so mainstream! Very vivid desriptions, gives the reader a feeling of darkness and insecurity but try and break out of the same "i hate life" mold next time. Good vocabulary, a few errors that I'm too lazy to point out, good emotion. Keep on trying!
    Writing is life again.

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    Re: A Suffering Prisoner

    a poem that is a product of mind and soul! keep that up.

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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