This one is complete. Lol I've finally finished a poem for sure.
Withering away within
Slowly drowning to death
Hands of some unknown force
Are clamped firmly around my neck
I feel like I’m suffocating
Where’s the fresh air?
It’s tainted with pollution
That no one can purify
The flowers aren’t in bloom anymore
Even though it’s that time of year
Their petals are falling…
Blowing away in the corrupt wind
Life isn’t what it used to be
And I don’t think I can carry on
Simple joys are all but gone
And true smiles are far and in between
It’s not enough for me any longer
To just look out the window
Everything is unfolding
I want to be part of it entirely
Sometimes I wonder if…
I’ve ever lived at all
It's kool, like all of ur comparisions.Very interesting.:cool: :thumb:
i agree with joe mage- it's good.:thumb:
Good Job!(whoa, u 2 r related! cool!:thumb: )
Very nice dude. Kinda sounds like lyrics from Dir En Grey wen u used words like corrupt and stuff. But i like it. Keep it up
nnniiiccceee.... Dark.... but I like it. Keep it up, man.
i like it. dunno y. but i juz like it :D
hey very nice white mage, keep it up.