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    Sufocating

    This one is complete. Lol I've finally finished a poem for sure.

    Suffocating

    Withering away within
    Slowly drowning to death
    Hands of some unknown force
    Are clamped firmly around my neck

    I feel like I’m suffocating
    Where’s the fresh air?
    It’s tainted with pollution
    That no one can purify

    The flowers aren’t in bloom anymore
    Even though it’s that time of year
    Their petals are falling…
    Blowing away in the corrupt wind

    Life isn’t what it used to be
    And I don’t think I can carry on
    Simple joys are all but gone
    And true smiles are far and in between

    It’s not enough for me any longer
    To just look out the window
    Everything is unfolding
    I want to be part of it entirely

    Sometimes I wonder if…
    I’ve ever lived at all

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    Re: Sufocating

    It's kool, like all of ur comparisions.Very interesting.

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    Re: Sufocating

    i agree with joe mage- it's good.

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    Re: Sufocating

    Good Job!(whoa, u 2 r related! cool! )

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    Re: Sufocating

    Very nice dude. Kinda sounds like lyrics from Dir En Grey wen u used words like corrupt and stuff. But i like it. Keep it up

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    Re: Sufocating

    nnniiiccceee.... Dark.... but I like it. Keep it up, man.
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    Re: Sufocating

    i like it. dunno y. but i juz like it

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    Re: Sufocating

    hey very nice white mage, keep it up.

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