Thread: Suicide's Picture

I can longerr feel the pain,

a small mistake, should be written: "I can no longer feel the pain"

And watch the flesh tear
Blood pours from my vains

This part describes in a bit too much detail, it could make a few poeple feel drousy.

All in all, this is as the tags imply a very dark manner of seeing things. Now that all these feelings are written down, try to find something positive in life. Find a movie to watch that only has simplistic childish beauty to bring things back up. Whenever I have a bad moment, I think it out, let my feelings pour out without involving anyone else except those who are willing to listen. Then I write something down and I guess if the person who hurt you won't listen or understand, only time can heal the wound, never fully, but enough to let your life go on.

Nicely written, but a bit repetitive, even if a song repeats itself, I prefer changing verses and slight modifications in the choir, though that's my personal taste

Thanks for pointing that of for me.I guess I over looked that but it's fixed now.Oh? Sorry about that as well.I just thought that I should write what I was feeling at the moment,that's all.But thank you for the advice though.

Angel this is an awesome song! You emotions running through every line is amazing! I can feel each word of the song and I'm actually singing to it right now! I will forever and always be your #1 fan!

MY ANGEL ROCKS!!!

Thank you soooooooooooooooooooo much Fox!!!! *gives you a big hug* I'm soooo very happy that you liked my new song!! YAY!!! I'm soooo happy!! *jumps up and down*

Hmm..I'm sorry to hear that but what you've written is very good though it has a few little spelling errors. Other than that I just wana say that I like how you built the concept and put it into a song but I really hope the lyrics weren't true...Sometimes its not worth hurting yourself for others and this song should somehow, you know, deter others from feeling like this... It does have the points where the the guy left with no remorse at all, but it doesn't mean the girl should hurt herself...at least not for someone so worthless and uncaring...But who's to say I'm right or wrong. I do hope you and your friend is well by now.

Thank you soooo very much silentangel!!! *hugs* I'm glad that you liked it. Oh and sorry about the spelling errors,guess I must have missed them lol.Oh and don't worry.My lyrics aren't true,well the cutting and all anyway lol.I just wrote it like that cause that was what me and my cuz were feeling at the time.But we're all better now though.After getting it off our chests we feel awhole lot better now.So no worries lol.

im sorry but this seems like lyrics to a song.
try making a song with it...
its a lot harder than u think