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    Sweet Victory~

    This is short ^^ll it's not exactly mine but here

    The winner takes all
    It's the thrill of one more kill
    The last one to fall
    Will never sacrifice their will

    Don't ever look back
    on the wind closing in
    The only attack
    were their wings on the wind
    oh the daydream begins

    And it's sweet, sweet, sweet victory,
    And it's ours for the taking
    It's ours for the fight
    And it's sweet, sweet, sweet victory,
    And the world is ours to follow

    Sweet sweet sweet victory

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    Re: Sweet Victory~

    I'm not a fan of rhyming poetry. OH! The last stanza is just beautiful. Hmm. There was just a tad bit of over use for the word sweet. Other than that? A clap worthy poem. I like it.
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    Re: Sweet Victory~

    Quote Originally Posted by Rave_Grip
    This is short ^^ll it's not exactly mine but here

    The winner takes all
    It's the thrill of one more kill
    The last one to fall
    Will never sacrifice their will

    Don't ever look back
    on the wind closing in
    The only attack
    were their wings on the wind

    oh the daydream begins

    And it's sweet, sweet, sweet victory,
    And it's ours for the taking
    It's ours for the fight
    And it's sweet, sweet, sweet victory,
    And the world is ours to follow

    Sweet sweet sweet victory
    Those were my favorite lines in the poem. I got a nice rush of Victory.

    o~Piggy-san~o

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    Re: Sweet Victory~

    it ok, not really the best. i have nothin against rhyming but i just prefer story poems to descriptions.

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    Re: Sweet Victory~

    whoa... this ain't so bad. ^_^
    good one, rave-san ^^ baa~ keep it up~!
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    Re: Sweet Victory~

    i heard that song once but i like how you
    put it and yea i like how victory feels this poem
    really inspires
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Sweet Victory~

    that was pretty awesome kool brother, keep it up.

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