Tainted

Lady Asphyxia · Apr 25, 2007, 07:35 PM

Tainted Rose

Only a vision of beauty…is what they all adore.
Darkness and insanity… they choose to ignore.

Just like a rose…my beauty will fade.
Leaving me with nothing but shades of gray.

Drifting away from an empty shell.
Lifeless inside…but no one could tell.

Just like a rose…my heart will break.
Leaving nothing for you to take…

Just like a rose…I’ll entirely fade
Leaving you memories of nothing but pain.

Author's Note- Alright this is actually the first poem ever that rhymed in my collections of poetry. This was probably written a month ago, while in Lit class. I was bored from the lecture and decided to write this.

*KuwiRules145* · Apr 25, 2007, 07:36 PM

Awesome poem! Hope you make more since I know you'll do good on all of them!

Hope you make more anyway.

!KimiFemi · Apr 25, 2007, 09:39 PM

good job Lady A i liked it
it flowed very well
but I kinda wanted you to go more into the darkness and insanity you hinted at in the begining ..

Lady Asphyxia · Apr 25, 2007, 09:50 PM

Thank you very much Kuwi for your comment....and I will post more up. I would love to actaully go more indepth with that first verse...but possibly as another poem. For this one...I really aimed for shortness, I felt that it would have gotton annoying if it continued on with its ryhming scheme. But that is just me...at one moment I like my poetry...then the next I get sick of it.

!KimiFemi · Apr 25, 2007, 09:56 PM

>.< lol it worked out well anyway but I would love to see what you come up with next

Lady Asphyxia · Apr 25, 2007, 10:02 PM

Yea, I'm actaully in the proccess of the poem called Insanity (Like I posted before). I suppose, I did actaully want to get more into the darkness and insanity from the first verse of my poem. After I had posted earlier, I had a line from the top of my head and started writing. So I'm multi-tasking right now (lol).

Sazurii · Apr 25, 2007, 10:19 PM

oh that was beautiful. For something you did in class with distractions and stuff

way nice. <---loves poetry

Lady Asphyxia · Apr 25, 2007, 10:23 PM

Ty, Ty...lol what can I say...my lecture class was just way lagging that day. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem though, it means you had a nice read. I myself love it when I read other poetry from many talented writers...it makes me feel relaxed and in the flow.

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Lady Asphyxia Newbie Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In your dreams Posts: 65 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Tainted Tainted Rose Only a vision of beauty…is what they all adore. Darkness and insanity… they choose to ignore. Just like a rose…my beauty will fade. Leaving me with nothing but shades of gray. Drifting away from an empty shell. Lifeless inside…but no one could tell. Just like a rose…my heart will break. Leaving nothing for you to take… Just like a rose…I’ll entirely fade Leaving you memories of nothing but pain. Author's Note- Alright this is actually the first poem ever that rhymed in my collections of poetry. This was probably written a month ago, while in Lit class. I was bored from the lecture and decided to write this. __________________ ~Obviously you can't chat about anything...even if you explain yourself~
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KuwiRules145 ♡♥I love you Kyle Kun!♥♡ Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In my lovers heart Posts: 963 Thanks: 4 Thanked 25 Times in 17 Posts	Re: Tainted Awesome poem! Hope you make more since I know you'll do good on all of them! Hope you make more anyway. __________________ Pop (o.o) click to show spoiler I Thought I was being smart by hiding a sig image that was against AO policy in a spoiler tag. I was wrong. I'm not smart. -Not really o.o
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!KimiFemi Banned Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: So many places... I cant remember ... Posts: 483 Thanks: 1 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts	Re: Tainted good job Lady A i liked it it flowed very well but I kinda wanted you to go more into the darkness and insanity you hinted at in the begining ..
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Lady Asphyxia Newbie Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In your dreams Posts: 65 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Tainted Thank you very much Kuwi for your comment....and I will post more up. I would love to actaully go more indepth with that first verse...but possibly as another poem. For this one...I really aimed for shortness, I felt that it would have gotton annoying if it continued on with its ryhming scheme. But that is just me...at one moment I like my poetry...then the next I get sick of it. __________________ ~Obviously you can't chat about anything...even if you explain yourself~
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!KimiFemi Banned Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: So many places... I cant remember ... Posts: 483 Thanks: 1 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts	Re: Tainted >.< lol it worked out well anyway but I would love to see what you come up with next
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Lady Asphyxia Newbie Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In your dreams Posts: 65 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Tainted Yea, I'm actaully in the proccess of the poem called Insanity (Like I posted before). I suppose, I did actaully want to get more into the darkness and insanity from the first verse of my poem. After I had posted earlier, I had a line from the top of my head and started writing. So I'm multi-tasking right now (lol). __________________ ~Obviously you can't chat about anything...even if you explain yourself~
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Sazurii Newbie Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: I have no idea...hold on lemme ask Posts: 51 Thanks: 3 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Tainted oh that was beautiful. For something you did in class with distractions and stuff way nice. <---loves poetry __________________ No Way! I'm The Beautiful One Dammit!
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Lady Asphyxia Newbie Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In your dreams Posts: 65 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Tainted Ty, Ty...lol what can I say...my lecture class was just way lagging that day. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem though, it means you had a nice read. I myself love it when I read other poetry from many talented writers...it makes me feel relaxed and in the flow. __________________ ~Obviously you can't chat about anything...even if you explain yourself~
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