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    Taken For Granted

    Sitting in my dark cold room crying,
    Wondering what I did wrong.
    You stand on the other side of the door,
    Why do you keep banging and screaming.

    I do everything that you want,
    It's never enough though.
    You will forget about it in the morning,
    Though it just happens again the next day.

    Crying myself to sleep as I curl around a pillow,
    Blocking out all the noise and closing my eyes.
    Readying myself for the next day,
    Mentally preparing myself for the abuse.

    Shivering slightly as the cold air travels over my body,
    Reaching for the blanket pulling it over me.
    Not enough to keep the cold wind out,
    Starting to shake even more.

    Waking with a bad cough and runny nose,
    My skin chilled to the bone.
    Ask to go to the doctors,
    Yet you tell me I'm a disappointment to you.

    Lefting my chin up high and turning my back to you,
    Letting you know how I feel.
    You are an ungrateful and hateful human being,
    What you think of me no longer matters.

    Taking a stand I walk out the door,
    With a suitcase in my hand.
    You will never see how you took me for granted,
    Until I'm gone till there is no more me.

    This is just a poem that came to me when I was watching a movie. Up for ridicule and critizism. Not that great but it's what I came up with.
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    Re: Taken For Granted

    Very nice flow and arangement of your wording. It nice to see a poem like this I mean its a poem about a woman stadnign up for her self instead of letting an abusive husband beat on her.

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    Re: Taken For Granted

    wow that was pretty kool. As i was reading the poem it came to my mind that this poem was based upon your experience or something. Nicely well done, keep it up.

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    Re: Taken For Granted

    Quote Originally Posted by Sinistra View Post
    Very nice flow and arangement of your wording. It nice to see a poem like this I mean its a poem about a woman stadnign up for her self instead of letting an abusive husband beat on her.
    I have to disagree. I'm not feeling the flow in this poem. And the wording? It seems to be a story put in certain verses. And the story itself? And how th story is brought to the reader? Isnt that wonderful.
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