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    B.L.O.O.D T.E.A.R.S

    I want to rip out your heart
    and shred it apart,
    Holding it in front of you,
    Watching the blood dripping
    through my hands it melts
    and my blood tears shed,
    You've stained my eyes
    with ten shades of Red

    Each one of my tear
    will become your fear,
    Each drop of my blood
    will drown you in a flood

    But now I hate you
    because you lie
    and I will always hate you
    until I die


    So wait for me
    when I am dead,
    I will do something
    that I would never regret
    Leaving my bloody heart on your bed.

    -z.a.i.n.a.b

    I just felt bored at school so i scribbled this rubbish down in my copy. X3 and it doesn't make sence...

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    Re: Tears Of Blood

    nice poem zainab^^
    it makes sence for me and it almost put me into tears.
    anyway keep up the good work and hope to see more from you

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    Re: Tears Of Blood

    Made sense to me! Had alot of good imagery. and a nice flow.

    "So wait for me
    when I am dead,
    I will do something
    that I would never regret
    Leaving my bloody heart on your bed"

    That part had alot of symbolic meaning to it... I like that you chose to say "on your bed". As opposed to "in your hands". The bed seems soo much more intimate.
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    Re: Tears Of Blood

    But tears of blood are a GOOD thing!

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    Re: Tears Of Blood

    its really really good sis, very sad, but has a really good flow. cant wait to hear more

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    Re: Tears Of Blood

    wow this is simply amazing!!! it has a good flow through the line/stanzas. i love it a lot and ur very good at the details.
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    Re: Tears Of Blood

    xD hassun...

    i gotta agree with u guys..it's nicely done.. gr8 job ^^ i like ur style... u combined more than 1 type of poem too ^^ *the way u rhymed* Keep up the good work ^^

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