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    Upon the parched mountains,
    The heat is everlasting,
    Lashing its rays onto my skin.
    Yet I play in its blissful presence,
    Barefoot I feel the hot, dry earth.
    The wind brings comfort evermore to cool my hot skin
    Then I feel a trickle of water on my nose, then on my arm, then on my leg.
    Trickle, Trickle, Trickle, I feel everywhere

    The sky, The sky, why does it cry?
    Bringing its tearful presence upon the land.
    But now I see why.
    The emotional of sadness it does not posess,
    For the teardrops are playing, like children in happiness,
    It replenishes the land from the sun's wickedness,
    And carpets the land in green grassiness.

    My laughter harmonised with the beat of the raindrops,
    Giving a beat to a whole new tune.
    We sing of the months of green and fertility that is to come.
    To the ground the raindrops fall.
    And like a lovely orchestra it makes its own tune.
    I heard myself shout as I say,
    "Let it rain, "Let it rain.

    For all I am inquisitive,
    As I dare myself to taste to tears of the sky,
    Will it be salty just like mine?
    And with an outstreched tongue, I greet a raindrop into my mouth.
    Oh how ordinarily sweet!
    It quenches my thirst with just one drop,
    I don't want this rain to stop.

    The smell of rain is intoxicating.
    Like alcohol to the drunkard, it knocks me out of my senses,
    And brings a new life of promise unto me.
    Also bringing a new sense of placid reasoning
    I am born again.

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    Re: Tears of the Sky

    wow...nicely done.... i like it... tears for the sky..nice nice... really good
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    I agree with rayme..... EXCELENT!!!! well done. I hope to see more from you soon. keep it up!
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    Re: Tears of the Sky

    Wow~! you did better than I did! I'm not much of a poet. so I like to stick to righting stories! but great work keep it up!
    I tryed to see things from your point of view but i cant seem to get my head that far up my ass!
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    Re: Tears of the Sky

    you did real nice job
    with this piece i enjoyed reading
    and i hope to read more from you

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    Re: Tears of the Sky

    WoW!!!!!!!!!! That was wonderful... It made me cry... How I wish for it to be summer and for me to be able to do that- to feel the warm touch of rain... With this poem you prfectly managed to bring the feling of the rain touching you again, and made me miss that feeling soooo much...

    The descriptions are just perfect and the theme is just perfect- dreamy, happy, sunshiny... love it...

    This is a truly wonderful poem.. I enjoyed reading it sooo much... Nice, nice work... I really love it!!! And I hope to see something more like this!!!! ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Awesome work! ...*ahem* AWESOME POEM!!!!

    Yes...I have to agree,...Tears of the sky....Nice idea!
    Love your descriptive words you put in there! I can picture the whole scene....simply remarkable.

    Hope to read more from you ~

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