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    The Teen and the Lady {The comparison}

    A girl walks into a store
    Dressed all girly,
    A security guard
    watches her closely.

    She has red hair, purple eyes
    Walks to the aisle with all the supplies.
    Grabs a pen, and a notebook
    the police watches the girl like a well known crook.

    A lady walked in,
    professionally dressed.
    Make up perfect
    Shoes by Guess.

    She looks like a lawyer, dressed in brown
    Chanel coat, Hair's not down.
    Walks to the aisle with the make-up
    Soon you'll see just a weird twist-up.

    The lady grabbed a nail polish and a granola bar.
    The girl got a brush and some little stickers with stars.
    All of a sudden, a loud beep.
    The alarm goes off, all eyes on the teen.

    Who's the person here that stole the things?
    The lady with the Chanel coat and shiny bling-bling.
    The teen paid for her items and walked out the door.
    The lady got into the police car, waiting for court.

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    I lost my touch..it's been so long
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    Re: The Teen and the Lady {The comparison}

    I think it is a really interesting insight into what adults see in teenagers. It is true that teenagers are seen not as either adults or children, but as a group on their own that is tainted by the rebelliousness of a select few. However interesting it is, I feel that if you are going to use a rhyming scheme, you should follow through with it. Great insight, though!

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    Thank you ^^ I saw a woman talk about this in a book and it got me to write about it. Thank you so much though^^
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    Re: The Teen and the Lady {The comparison}

    At first you will think it was teh teen who did it my bad ....it's a bad case of stereo types but the poem is a good one of bringing out contradicting stuff and letting it come out as an interesting recipe.
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    Re: The Teen and the Lady {The comparison}

    I like this a lot. I am always watched (Like a hawk) when I go in a store,only by the way I look. It is so pathetic. I look younger than I am,and wear a lot of black....so I guess that means I am definitely gonna steal something(yeah right!) Actually when I read it,I thought it would be the other one,because the way people dress does not affect these things....(and the stickers with stars sounded cute* that's what I'd buy~)

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    Re: The Teen and the Lady {The comparison}

    Hahaha I would do that too^^. This inspired me because of a story I read in a book..can't remember it..I guess people see things differently by how you dress, or look without knowing who you really are. I find it harsh, but sadly that's how it is. People are judged everyday and even if you hear someone say "I don't care what people think" Deep down they really do and it hurts their feelings..but even you have to tell them off sometimes.

    Sara- Thank you^^and It does get kinda surprising XD I kinda twisted it up a little.
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