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    Temper rising.

    Temper is Rising,
    Anger bubbling,
    Hatred, something that normally doesn't show,
    Is seeping through at people around you

    Eyes turning colors, reflecting the anger within
    People know not to worry but they still fear,
    fear for something you might do to yourself,
    Friends crowding you holding you back,

    But the only thing you see is a picture of yourself
    On the pavement barely breathing.
    You try to ignore the image but it is too strong,
    Your friends hold you back but you keep on fighting.

    All you think about is getting it over and done,
    And yet you cant because they wont let you.
    You hate them but love them, you wish them to go,
    But at the same time you wish them to stay.

    They are your strong hold, and your focus,
    Their the only things driving you forward,
    Your love keeps telling you it will be alright,
    And yet you ignore. finally it is all done and over.

    You got through it somehow, you just had to laugh,
    When you laugh you release bad thoughts and when
    You frown it is contagious, In the end you just have to
    Remember that all you have to do is laugh and smile.

    Thanks guys for reading please tell me what you think although not the best, but I had to get it off my chest been bugging me since yesterday. thanks again.
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    Re: Temper rising.

    Wowzers! I like this one! Such raw power and very descriptive! I wish I had two extra hands to give you four thumbs up, LOL. Good work!


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    Re: Temper rising.

    i like it because......i like all of your pomems :P

    Tanks zyta

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    WoW!!!! O.o I didn't quite get what was to blame in that anger in this poem... But that was great... your anger was described so good that I remembered the last time I was angry (hmm... that was quite a looong time ago... ) and I could just see it all happening in front of me... great!!!!!


    A wonderful, wonderful work. Perfect I would say, if I would have understood why the anger I really enjoyed reading this and I hope to see more!!!! Keep it up!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    I dont know what to say... impressive, feelings seem capatible. Keep up the work, your doing great!
    I tryed to see things from your point of view but i cant seem to get my head that far up my ass!
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    dam man your deep with your pomes man.That's why your a good friend.but your pomes i can relate to them.

    Thankx Highteckdudu

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    Thank you! Keep it up! If you need some one to talk to, just ask yo!
    I tryed to see things from your point of view but i cant seem to get my head that far up my ass!
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    Re: Temper rising.

    Quote Originally Posted by Ichigo_06 View Post
    Why Thank you Lasura I am glad you like it and the thing is I dont even know where that anger came from. lol random Anger I guess
    Thank you kim and thank you Naruto, I am glad you both liked my poems as well. You guys are great friends as well.
    lol ^^ so that's why... yeah... I know how that feels... has happened Now I understand it completely- you might say the confusion it creates is just another device to make people fully realise how you have felt

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