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    Simple tenderness.

    It’s a human heart
    So persistent, yet so vulnerable
    It’s … something like water actually
    Free to flow wherever it wants to, mixing things [emotions] along the way

    It’s soft and so warm

    Needs love to go on and it gets so excited
    When passion strikes

    It stops
    When depressed

    It rises it’s beat when happy
    Or just simply resumes back to normal when it’s over.

    Everybody knows how easy it is to just grip a nerve
    And it will stop beating
    You can do whatever you wish to
    It is your PREY after all

    It recognizes one emotion extremely easily
    Love… just three words – “I love you”
    Is what all it takes to make it go on and on

    You might get used to the feeling
    But not when somebody devours
    That tenderness, leaving you so open

    No matter how many times,
    It just makes me smile and chuckle instead
    An organ, which is supposed to be go with the help of brain
    Helps us most of the time with the emotions in our life

    You might convince me that you have feelings for me
    Indescribable ones, stronger than your life
    But all I know is that it all ends the same way

    Give me a reason to trust you
    To believe you’ll put up with me for your life
    Accept me with every flaw that I have
    To not judge me simply because I’m different to you

    Go ahead I will be listening, awaiting the response
    My mindset has been set
    And the water has dissolved so much that the rest settles down, deep inside
    Bonne chance, dearest
    But I am different now
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    Re: Tender Water

    awww such a touching poem rave very meaningful great job putting it into words ^__^ 10/10

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    Re: Tender Water

    How is it meaningful? Please give more quality to your posts when commenting.
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    Re: Tender Water

    hmm.. u spoke of the truth in a figurative way.. nice... good work my boy xD
    but why u did not speak of the black hearts?
    It recognizes one emotion extremely easily
    Love… just three words – “I love you”
    Is what all it takes to make it go on and on
    hah i like this part.. girls do that don't they

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    Talking Re: Simple tenderness.

    So much expression and so much to say....
    water... the strongest of the elements but yet still the most fragille...
    can the water handle the fire and yet not desapear nor turn off the fire?
    Fire yet in trust can burn.... can it be handle... can it be trusted?

    Those three words "I love you" can be tell from the lips but not from the heart... can they be really trusted?
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    Re: Tender Water

    A very nice poem Rave-kun. Something that everyone must consider when thinking of love or immediatly falling in love..
    Last edited by Descended From Darkness; Apr 09, 2007 at 01:59 PM.

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    Re: Tender Water

    I like the comparison of emotion with water.it is a good juxtaposition of ideas and imagery.that is what a good poem should have.

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