Thread: Tet's Haiku Attempt.

Very nice haiku!! I've always been a big fan of haiku. In fact, I consider it my forte.

It's good to see that you put much thought in to your words (because without it, a haiku is meaningless). ^_^ Although...

See these broken strings
Tune dulled by our rough flow
I can not let go

This one is written as follows: 5-6-5 and normally it's 5-7-5. The other ones are just fine and this one is still well written, I just thought I'd point that out to give ya a little help.

Anywho, kudos to you! ^_^

I was getting confused on my syllables today and well, I guess I just messed that one up.

Haiku aren't things I usually write but in the end I guess I enjoy them as well. Hence my title.. The Poet Sword.

Thank you very much compadre. I'll keep trying if yah'z keep buying.

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Hmmm... well how I was tought, haiku must create an immage in your mind and have great meaning behind it. Well the haiku that seemed to do this things the best for me was this one:

Here be winds of change
They guide us into our life
Let them take us all.

Well I could immagine a snowy field and wind carrying snowlakes and sand over it, so there is an immage. And the thought I found in this is that the guidance in our life is hard to get hold of, and we have to know how to just follow the flow, or the wind... Learn to just enjoy our life. And the last one is nice too...

Well your haiku are nice, it's hard for me to write something like that, hard to create a wonderful image with just a few words...

Umm.. I don't quite understand the first one... because, if the cords are broaken, there is nothing to hold on to... If the flow is so rough... you get cast out of the river... Wait... if the flow is too rough, you just can not get out... alright I got it ^^ The first line confused me...

And the third haiku just didn't create an image... that was the problem with it...

Well I hope to see more haiku here, they're nice to read ^^

Originally Posted by Lasura

Hmmm... well how I was tought, haiku must create an immage in your mind and have great meaning behind it. Well the haiku that seemed to do this things the best for me was this one:

Well I could immagine a snowy field and wind carrying snowlakes and sand over it, so there is an immage. And the thought I found in this is that the guidance in our life is hard to get hold of, and we have to know how to just follow the flow, or the wind... Learn to just enjoy our life. And the last one is nice too...

Well your haiku are nice, it's hard for me to write something like that, hard to create a wonderful image with just a few words...

Umm.. I don't quite understand the first one... because, if the cords are broaken, there is nothing to hold on to... If the flow is so rough... you get cast out of the river... Wait... if the flow is too rough, you just can not get out... alright I got it ^^ The first line confused me...

And the third haiku just didn't create an image... that was the problem with it...

Well I hope to see more haiku here, they're nice to read ^^

Red: Well the Third one was more about an ideal and not an image.

What is worth saying?
Words say only so much now..
Action speaks for me.

Basically I was saying that words only go so far, but action speaks more then words ever could.

I think you've got the main idea of the other ones. Thank you for your commenting. I appreciate it. < Hits the Thanks buttons. >

Yes, I completely understood what you ment with it and the idea is great ^^ I just always am looking forward for these small poems to create immages in my head... It's just very nice to get these immages in my head, but it is very hard to do

Thank you for the thanks ^^