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    That's why it's called a crush.

    This is my newest poem that I wrote last night. Tell me what you think.

    That’s why it’s called a crush.

    Feelings that I’ve always had to hide
    I’ll always keep them deep inside
    I won’t tell anyone these whispers within
    Not even my dearest friends

    Fear is what keeps these things
    Caged inside my soul
    Years ago children so mean
    Your laughter and taunts
    Haunts all of my dreams

    How I hate your cruel smiles
    That makes me keep it all in
    I can’t forget or let go
    No matter how hard I try

    I’ll forever remember those eyes
    So happy filled with satisfaction
    After telling one forbidden secret
    It crushed one young girl’s heart

    The boy didn’t like her
    So he laughed with the rest of them
    How could he feel something for that girl?

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    Re: That's why it's called a crush.

    Whoa nicely done, It took me 4-5 rereads to understand the message that you were trying to send out. I would say this is the highlight of your poem that caught my eye,

    Fear is what keeps these things
    Caged inside my soul
    Years ago children so mean
    Your laughter and taunts
    Haunts all of my dreams
    ^^Best part! Keep the good work up!

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    Re: That's why it's called a crush.

    Quote Originally Posted by White_Mage88
    How I hate your cruel smiles
    That makes me keep it all in
    I can’t forget or let go
    No matter how hard I try

    I’ll forever remember those eyes
    So happy filled with satisfaction
    After telling one forbidden secret
    It crushed one young girl’s heart
    i love these parts, so understanding.


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