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    Think Of You Always!

    I Lay My Head To The Table
    Thinking Everything Is All Gone,
    No More Tear's From These Eye's
    Then You Prove Me Wrong,How
    Can This Be Happening To Me.

    I Hear The Phone Ring Could
    It Be? ,I Remember What You
    Said And Cried Once More
    You Would Never Call Me.

    It Must Have Rang 100 Times
    Then It Quite Like My Heart Did,
    The Life I Live Without You Can
    Be Compared To Being Buried Alive
    God How I Miss You If Only Things
    Could Be The Same.

    this one is pretty short i know]
    but i have had some time to think
    about stuff and this poem pretty
    much speaks the truth from the heart
    of alot of people. hope everyone likes
    it and comments or sugestions are
    apreciated. wasnt sure of a title for it
    but hope it fits
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Think Of You Always!

    you could do better on phrasing, deary ^^ or is it just typo? i think the first word of the next line gets caught up in the preceding line.. nice job, though

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    Re: Think Of You Always!

    it was prashing i am still woorking on that with my writing
    but thanks for the tip though i will try and phrase it better
    next time, and thanks for the complament
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Think Of You Always!

    Nice wording, but you need to work more with your grammar, capitalization and punctuation. Overall, it was a pretty kool poem.

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    Re: Think Of You Always!

    Hey Bro this one is awesome! I know that feeling and I understand how you felt! Poems are a whole other language that allow you to express your true feelings with words! Great job bro!!!

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    Re: Think Of You Always!

    you don't have to worry the title is just right for this poem. I really liked it. I almost cried cause it was so sweet. I wish I could come up with masterpieces like you do. You have such a great mind for this. It's a shame you're not asked by famous people to write poems for their wives and husbands. Keep up the great job you're doing and as always I look forward to reading more.
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    Re: Think Of You Always!

    Well I'm not going to go into the brown nosing someone else, but I will say it was a very good poem and it was sad. I understand your feelings, very nice job.
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