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    Third eye

    hello, there fellow AO, member. its been quite a long time since i last posted a poem. well, thanks for reading. you may post comments and critiques, it is highly appreciated. ^^




    Third eye

    Why am I seeing things
    That people can’t see?
    Why am I hearing screams
    That no one can’t hear?

    Every now and then I fear,
    Of seeing people who are bleeding,
    But every time I draw near,
    My hands pass right through them.

    My ears are getting worn-out,
    From the infinite deafening screams,
    The endless curses of revenge,
    The pleas for help on unfinished business.

    What can I possibly do?
    I couldn’t ask anyone for help!
    Alone would I ever suffer,
    From this life I am fated for.



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    Re: Third eye

    very cool poem raja its been a while since i read anything from you
    and this poem is great reminds me of that movies 6th since
    and i like how you desribed the the feeling if always hears and seeing things
    like your going crazy
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    ^^ thanks Chris for posting a comment on my poem, it is highly appreciated. ^^

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Raja!!!! Hey Wonderful poem! I should've talked to you to inspire me! My Bro HolderoftheDarkChalice helped me out, but anyways you poem awesome just like your fanfic and I'm still anxiously awaiting chapter 5! You did a great job! 5 out of 5 from the Fox! The reason for the five is it's totally different style that I've have never seen and I Love it!

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    this is a bit sad.. The guy bearing all the pain for himself... I wish people whould show others their emotions and tell another person.. I dont like to see others suffer...
    Thank you Lasura!
    My lover speaks; and he says, 'Arise my beloved my beautiful one and come!' -Song of Songs 2:10

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    @ BlueFox: Thanks also for a wonderful comment on my poem^^ it is really appreciated. a 5 out of 5! ^^

    @rksamurai: thanks on commenting on my poem it is highly appreciated.

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    Re: Third eye

    hey raja awesome poem none of mine can beat that,but it won't hurt too try ^_^so watch out for my poems I'm going to posed some soon^_^well peace out

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    Re: Third eye

    Omg!! This is soooo awesome Raja!!! I sooo love it!!! The sadness that you wrote in your poem was wonderful.Going through something like that would probably drive anyone insane.Awesome job as always Raja!!
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