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    Thoughts-upon-Time

    Shot down,
    then spun round,
    pointing out the vaious things,
    of me between then and now,
    the future collides with the past,
    no one is always sure at what the want,
    espically after the fact of?
    The fact of?
    the fact of change,
    thats right,
    pasts are sold,
    futures are bought,
    but in this day and age,
    who tells the difference,
    perhaps I,
    and then again,
    maybe you too?
    I've seen all you here before at the rise and the fall, lets go down and ring the bell at the Levity Ball.

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    Re: Thoughts-upon-Time

    I like this poem... Short but has long truth behind it... Especially the line "the future collides with the past"... & what follows behind that... Change plays a huge role in people lives/decision it isn't even funny... N*e*ways before I start rambling on I just want to say:

    I love this poem it has much truth of feel to it & how time seems to stand still for the simple fact that your past can come back to haunt you & even change people for the better or worse...

    The heart can't lie... Truth is... I love you!!!

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    Re: Thoughts-upon-Time

    I dunno, his was just dumb luck actually...but thanks either way for you comments about it, short and deep I guess then?
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    Re: Thoughts-upon-Time

    Very nice job indeed, like your questioning of the reader ^_^

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    Re: Thoughts-upon-Time

    Agreed with Inuruto and Sashacat A very nice poem indeed with a long truth

    Love the way the poem goes.. nicely written ^^

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    Post Re: Thoughts-upon-Time

    Yeah,

    I agree with you all, The poem's really nice and true.

    Personaly,
    I found it quite hard to follow the way you wrote it, but other than that it was quite nice to read and was something unique as I always say.


    -Zainab

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    Re: Thoughts-upon-Time

    well I guess that I cant all get good critiscism all the time, so next time I wil ltry to make it flow better so the masses can read it better
    I've seen all you here before at the rise and the fall, lets go down and ring the bell at the Levity Ball.

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