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    A threat to a war. And what's it all for?

    Go ahead and throw things out.
    Twist them like I said it first.
    This started with a threat.
    Not from me.
    Not even to me.
    But on an unborn life.
    It continued with a taunt.
    So vicious and mean.
    Anger seething from every pore.
    And it turned into a stupid war.
    Ending up in the with the word whore,
    Yet I can count the numbers on two hands.
    And I'm willing to bet that you can't.
    Then things got blown out of perportion.
    Daddys got mad.
    Apparently more then one.
    But don't twist things NOW and say it was me.
    I didn't threaten you, till you threatened my baby.
    After two which were lost,
    Which you casually tossed,
    In my face, just to see if you could get a reaction.
    Well it wasn't from me that you would,
    Or will see.
    Theres a tiny life inside.
    Struggling to stay here.
    For some one to hold it near.
    So tiny and innocent,
    And already it has an enemy.
    Just because you couldn't,
    Let yourself like me.
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    I know. I know. The rhyming adn not rhyming is a problem. HOWEVER...it wasn't intentionally rhyming anywhere. I only realized it did after I'd spilled my thoughts. I don't expect ANYONE to enjoy this. I've been mentally blocked and too worried about other things to write anything lately. But I'm getting back on it with my new journal. So maybe something soon.

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    Re: A threat to a war. And what's it all for?

    Quote Originally Posted by bratling View Post
    Go ahead and throw things out.
    Twist them like I said it first.
    This started with a threat.
    Not from me.
    Not even to me.
    But on an unborn life.
    It continued with a taunt.
    So vicious and mean.
    Anger seething from every pore.
    And it turned into a stupid war.
    Ending up in the with the word whore,
    Yet I can count the numbers on two hands.
    And I'm willing to bet that you can't.
    Then things got blown out of perportion.
    Daddys got mad.
    Apparently more then one.
    But don't twist things NOW and say it was me.
    I didn't threaten you, till you threatened my baby.
    After two which were lost,
    Which you casually tossed,
    In my face, just to see if you could get a reaction.
    Well it wasn't from me that you would,
    Or will see.
    Theres a tiny life inside.
    Struggling to stay here.
    For some one to hold it near.
    So tiny and innocent,
    And already it has an enemy.
    Just because you couldn't,
    Let yourself like me.
    --------------------------------------------------
    I know. I know. The rhyming adn not rhyming is a problem. HOWEVER...it wasn't intentionally rhyming anywhere. I only realized it did after I'd spilled my thoughts. I don't expect ANYONE to enjoy this. I've been mentally blocked and too worried about other things to write anything lately. But I'm getting back on it with my new journal. So maybe something soon.

    There are some grammar mistakes; you might want to look at those. Other than that, it is a really good poem. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Keep working! I can see this AWESOME potential in you.

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    Re: A threat to a war. And what's it all for?

    Wow... this is nicely written though.. it is good... the rhyme don't really matter much...
    but it still flowed ^^

    Hmm.. :/ war...sheesh.... not a good thing ~.~

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    Re: A threat to a war. And what's it all for?

    Divine, I appriciate your criticisim every time I get it. (Correct that word for me please!) I really appriciate that you enjoy my writing, mistakes and all. I feel things changing as far as...style and subject go. I have bigger things to write about then petty hurt feelings these days. So maybe i'll finally move on from the tit-for-tat crap.
    And as always rayme. Thank you! I love your comments most of all. They always make me smile.

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