They have said any person with ideas can be a threat,
Sick of men coming and going, with no real changes.
And if they be true I am the most dangerous yet.
Through it all, young stays military recruits ages.
Seeing that; I am a threat, write a check, it’s no bet.
They spend money on everything except the truth.
Time they pay for wasting our greatest asset, our youth.
Awesome. I love your style. You're very good with rhyming, too, which is something I really don't have much talent for.
"Through it all, young stays military recruits ages". I think you should add a possessive apostrophe to "recruits". Or just simply put "recruiting" instead.
I don't understand why there's a semicolon after "seeing that". It feels like it should be continuous with the next phrase.
The reason why I put weird punctuation in is to signal a stop. When there should be a pause but not a line break.
that makes sense to me lolgood job
I'm the best you'll ever have because i am that f*ing AMA-zing chic who can stand on her own d*n feet and becasue of you I am the GreatestThank you so much SasuraiHell and Gwen
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