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    Thunderstorm

    Colors of blue,
    Shades of gray,
    All darkens within the day,
    Covering all as though a hue,

    Lightning flashes,
    Streaks of yellow,
    Thunder crashes,
    The heavens bellow,

    Rain starts pouring,
    Consuming all,
    Thunder still roaring,
    Creating a wall,

    A wall that is both week and strong,
    Droplets that beats and weaves the song,
    The song of sorrow, agony, and pain,
    Tempting the world to go insane

    please give me your criticism.

    within the darkened realm of the mind, is endless shadows, wrenching pain, warming love, and burning desires.

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    Re: Thunderstorm

    This is extremely good It is very descriptive and uses good imagery, I find it hard to write thees kind of poems personally.
    Sword in hand, fire in heart, I walk towards my future just playing my part.
    The school of the undefeated East! The winds of the king! Zenshin! Keiretsu! Tempa! Kyoran! Look! The East is burning red!” (G Gundam)
    Ride Fast, Live Free & Stay strong.

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