Evry high ways leave me back to you
i remember the last time i hold
ill said it and get it done
do u ever like me?
show me who I really i am
by giving ur heart
this cant last forever
we might fall apart
time is confusion
as the questions from the heart
Taking all steps
straigh to fate
with out asking my self
why i chosse my time to be like this?
passing sun and moon
evrytime, evry day i couldn't
stop thinking about u
Some miracles happend in the past
i was taking on the world
leaving for a dream a moment
will u take it all from my heart
im looking around the time
when u were behind me
''and u allways say
that i dont have to search anymore
but i could i still can hear u whisper
my life and time were before
I'm a lil confused about what you're saying in this poem. but I still like it. ahaha. =P
i better make em more significant.
Not too bad. The thought was there but it needed more organization. Still good though. I would keep writing poems it seems to be your niche.
Punctuation, spelling, and grammar. Confusing in the reader is the result of this.
Originally Posted by For3v3r_Lost
I like the poem, but it is just a little confusing. Keep up the good work!
i did get it... (: and i really liked it, haha, i'm used to bad grammar ^-^
Another poem by baal,spelling again,how many times should you be corrected? By the way nice one...make it better next time...