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    Re: time

    You packed a lot into just 3 lines. And even did a ryme scheme. Well done. Not every poem has to have meter and ryme but if you can get it I say go for it, and that is difficult with only 3 lines. Was this meant to be like a Sijo?

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    Re: time

    Great poem.

    Wish you would have had a more versatile layout, though.
    And the last line, could you explain it? I don't quite understand the 'times toys' bit.

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