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    Timeless

    A single drop of blood.
    A mile that has yet to be run.
    A voice upon the wind.
    A face that always grins.
    A riddle, a rhyme a nonsensical tale.
    A tear that has yet to be shed.
    A life that is better off dead.
    All of these things, they seem to make all the wonderful things in life...
    So completely timeless.

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    Re: Timeless

    All of these things, they seem to make all the wonderful things in life...
    So completely timeless.
    Have you seen Courage: The Cowardly Dog?

    Well those last two lines reminded me of that one episode with the weird guy who speaks really slow and smiles at everything he says.

    Anyway, your poem was nice. Simple and neat. Not too long, even though I was expecting it to be because of the title..

    Cool poem.

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    Re: Timeless

    I liked the scene you have set up in this poem, and on each sentence I can picture exactly what you're talking about. This poem sort of gives me a tensely feeling that you might have when you're worried about something. Anyway, Good job. ;D

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    Even though this poem was short, it's the quality and content that counts. Your poem was very descriptive. Talking about simple things and referring to them as timeless was excellent. Simple imagery, but sends a powerful message. Wow, even great things come in small packages. Good luck.

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    Re: Timeless

    Short and very sweet~ There were a couple lines I really favoured.
    Quote Originally Posted by Averian View Post
    A riddle, a rhyme a nonsensical tale.
    A tear that has yet to be shed.
    A life that is better off dead.
    This whole section really got to me,but it's all great!*

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