starfire1036

For heaven sent.
In heaven no more.
Just crushed.
Damned into the floor.

Bent, beaten, and broken.
She lays limp and still.
Happiness he has taken.
Her memory he will kill.

Precious
but not.
He'll have left her,
left her to rot.

Her heart beats its final beat,
his hand crushing her throat.
her soul out of her reach,
she'll soon approach.

To him, one so mighty
she floats away.
Kiss upon her cheek,
ever so slightly.

He hurts you no more,
unto me you'll stay.
Out of your heart pain will pour,
for he can't hurt you anymore.

To heaven you will go,
and there you will stay.
To hell will go your father
for taking your life away.

dark1angel

Well the only title i can suggest is *Heaven's Strike*
I really do enjoy into what you have inserted it gives of a good feeling, and also on how the wonderful perspective view gives of on what happens in the end.
You have done a really great effort, although you may need to have more visual details since it was left out partly not much. I do wish to see more relating to this in the future.

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starfire1036

well i never intended for there to be visuals xD so that i cant help but i am glad u liked it... not quite the title i was looking for...

Hassun

I also suggest putting your poems in the right thread next time.

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FinalXepher

i enjoyed this peom. but i really liked the last stanza

it gave a sorta "happiness" kind of feeling. if i were to give this a title, i would call it

"Ode of a Tortured Soul"

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Haruko Haruhara

Its a beautiful poem, I think the name of it should be "Fallen" or "Fallen Angel", to give
it a meaning to the Heaven reference in the poem.

starfire1036

well lets see... i like it but it seems that i have already givin it a anme on my myspace page but thank you