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    Together Forever

    here's a poem i wrote last hour...

    together forever

    I can't say you'll have everything
    I can't say anything new
    Ths only thing I can say
    Is that I love you

    Everything you do makes me laugh
    Everything you do makes me smile
    you put your arms around me
    joking all the while

    When i hugged you back
    You kindly looked at me
    You said, "I'll tell my girlfriend
    Just wait and see."

    I walked along
    Been waiting a day or two
    As much as I look around
    all I see is you

    Ignore your little friends
    For they don't like me so
    But i love you, and that a fact
    Into the sunset we go

    That's my dream
    Sweet and true
    But that will never happen
    The love I wish I knew

    I wrote this poem so that people can see exactly how my mind works in some area's and also because it can apply to alot of people. It helped my friend after I thought it up and now her and her boyfriend are getting along just fine... enjoy....^_^

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    Re: Together Forever

    Well oyur poem it seems very emotional and also very descriptive and this is an indeed great poem for anyone that can tell how the mind works on yours *Jamie5192* and there is no other way I can describe to yours.

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    Re: Together Forever

    What a romantic poem! I love it. It's so cute and adorable of what you said! Has so many emotion to it that what makes it amazing!!!! I hope to see more!
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    Re: Together Forever

    Great poem! I feel the same way when I fall in love, you just can't help but laugh at everything they do.

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    Re: Together Forever

    It's a sweet poem ^_^ I didn't get the part when the mood suddenly changes since it was going so smoothly. Some capital letters. You're good at writing romantic poems keep it up ^_^

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    Re: Together Forever

    thats soooo sweet ^__^ i liked it alot ^__^ im pleased with your work jamie lol ^__^ i want more!!!

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    Re: Together Forever

    I love this poem!!! It's so sweet, so nice, so loving... How come I can't writte sunshiny poems like that?
    A great work, I think, didn't find anything bad in it, maybe the bright theme just blinded me...

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