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    Tonight at Nine or Ten

    How I long to hold you,
    And touch your loving face.
    But to my horrifying surprise,
    You said you needed space.

    How I pleaded for you to stay,
    By my side till the end.
    You said this love for 20 years,
    Was all pretend.

    So when you left,
    O boy was I mad.
    With this anger inside me,
    There was one time to be sad.

    I grabbed my ski mask,
    And prayed to god I’d make it back.
    For what I was about to do,
    Someone’s head was about to get crack.

    On the way I talked to myself ,
    The reason you left me.
    Was simple as right and left,
    You were cheating.

    So tonight at nine, or maybe ten,
    Look out for me my dear sweet bastard.
    Cause if you go to sleep,
    You’ll wake up in a disaster.
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    I'm a solider of Pen and Paper!
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    Re: Tonight at Nine or Ten

    Ski mask, huh? Gonna dress up like Sub-Zero? I'm just joking. ^_^
    Way to hold a vendetta! I've never threatened anybody via poetry. I don't know what to say. Except, are you okay?


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    Re: Tonight at Nine or Ten

    i am speechless. that was quite a poem right there, huh? but i thought it was great. nice poem, with smooth flow of words. i like your choice of words ^^

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    Re: Tonight at Nine or Ten

    Hey isn't ski mask means Friday the 13th? Coooolll...
    Besides my lame joke, your poem is very easy to imagine, and what feelings go through your mind. Very well done!

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    Re: Tonight at Nine or Ten

    I really like this poem- it has so many emotions in it- love and longing, sadness, anger, a little bit of funny, kicking buts!!!
    I like the attitude you show in this poem also... deamn would I wish to be like that Hmmm... someone would be dead by now... *looks around*
    A great poem Shippo!!!

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