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May 18, 2006, 03:56 PM
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| The Sassy Cat  | Too late My eyes opened slowly to you I was ready to tell I adored you I liked you Building up courage day by day I was ready to tell what I had to say Letting out one last shake I turned to tell you before too late Into your eyes I stared My lips opened to say what I had prepared Before I knew it you were speaking You told me you something that sent me freaking You kissed another girl She wasn't me Nor was I her All that courage built up washed away Now I had nothing to say I shook with fear and tears It had taken me all these years I wanted to say it for once I wanted to say it no matter the loss Now here I stood Just a moment too late What a fool I felt My heart without any help These words I wanted to give Now would be too painful to say and live My heart's walls all down How unprepared I was for that breaking sound For once in my life I wanted to say I like you Now that I'm too late My heart is something I'm beginning to hate (Mmm...idk...enjoy the sucky story/poem thingy..mabob?)  |
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May 18, 2006, 04:14 PM
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 Credits: 657 | Re: Too late no it's not sucky! it's awesome, really! ^_^ but hmm... it would be better if you add "it's" on the eighth line... i think the flow kinda stopped there, at least for me though... keep it up... ^_^
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May 18, 2006, 07:18 PM
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Credits: 304 | Re: Too late The poem you write is not that bad. But I have to agree it would sound better if you did put it's on the eighth line.
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Jun 29, 2006, 11:50 PM
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Credits: 3,351 | Re: Too late Wow,I liked it  I think it's awesome,sad but awesome! Good job
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Jun 30, 2006, 01:58 AM
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Credits: 458 | Re: Too late No I think it's really good and for that I will give you a ten great work. 
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Jun 30, 2006, 03:57 AM
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Credits: 210 | Re: Too late cool work here.... something struck me when i'm reading this really... its really nice... keep up the good work
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