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My mood soon changes,
Anger starts to spread.
I'm sitting here thinking,
Where did I go wrong?
I was sitting here crying,
Asking you for help.
Instead I felt so stupid,
Talking in a different language.
I was looking for support,
Opening up to you.
But instead I got a cold chill,
Brushes away, out of sight.
Was what I did so wrong?
Was it too much to ask?
Hmmm...simple and straight to the point.. nicely written.. ^^ i suggest some methaphores :D make it sassier~! xD :p
Wow D you have alot of confusion there wish I was able to help like you helped me, good poem anyways.
thank you both, When I get emotional I tend to write poems that are really straight to the point as I find it easier to just say how I feel and not try to cut corners.
.....Sazzy @.@
Wow, I love this poem! So much emotion of sadness and depression...I feel like that almost everytime I fight with my....bf... I hate the feeling when You quetion yourself but can't answer either... :(:
But I like the poem non the less! :2thumbs:
-x- Zainab -x-
yeah I felt really alone last night and I was chatting with my boyfriend but I dunno, I felt more alone then ever and was looking for something and ended up crying :(Quote:
Originally Posted by ihauntforlust
Thanks for commenting ihauntforlust
I like this. The feeling it gave was very sincere. Im also enjoying the fact that your poems are on the shorter side, yet they all pack in quite a bit of emotion. I'll be keeping an eye out for more of your work.
That was sad feeling and lonely too how bad that?
It's hard to feel lonely and that what make us start to ask too much ..This poem really short but in same time really awesome work so weel done Sazzy..^^