I pray for the sweet release of forgiveness
To not have to to taste the bitterness of misery
And this searing guilt
I wish for peace of mind
To sleep soundly once again
And breathe easy once more
Is this selfish to want what I don't deserve
To enjoy the safety that I so foolishly cast off
And seek the love that I lost
My heart will not give up its torment against me
It screams loudly of my treason, my crime
Wishing to send me into the depths of despair
Who made ne to endure such persecution
To face such unending torment
Cursing me from the day I was concieved
Is it so wrong to want to achieve happiness
Even at great cost
I want it so badly
I wish for this torment to end
To be back to the way so true and pure
And to stand by your side once more
Thus these passionate words I speak without holding back
To lay upon your pillow
And speak to you in the darks of night
*applauses* Well done!!!
Excellent poem and a very strong meaning!!! The beginning was like :eek: WOW, but the ending was like :omg: WOW-er :laugh: :laugh: :laugh: .
This is really nicely done...Maybe you should try 'Poem of the Month' :2thumbs:
Lots of sad emotion was shown in between of the poem (My honest opinion), But it ended really sweetly.
oh my... *applauses along with zainab while standing* i agree with zainab there...
The way the poem goes was very good..a strong poem which ended sweetly...it's very nicely written :D nice work ^^ keep up the good job,... why kogs haven't commented.. hhmm.. :p
Becuase i was doing some thing thats why.
Originally Posted by RayMe
As for the poem very well done ! very nice flow to it.It was a little dark but even so i still liked it allot specially the ending.Good to see some poems from you again.
well this is a very strong emotional poem,
it reads like you are saying it to your family, and that you wish for them to take you back.
all in all I find it without a doubt wonderful and sad all at the same time.
congratulations on a job well done.
OMG! This was put together very well! This poem is so sad, yet so friggin' BEAUTIFUL at the same time!!! I like your vocabulary alot. I especially like how you question whether it's right or wrong to want to be happy. That's a common question amongst us humans these days. It is morally right to be happy at the risk of yourself or others? We don't know for sure, but I think that whatever makes you happy is nothing but right.
I have to agree with everyone on this Neves it is really good I liked it. My favorite from you so far. keep up the good work. I am glad to read another good poem from you. nice job