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    Torn

    How could such a pain exist?
    It's my fault
    I did this
    I caused you all such a great pain
    I made you all cry for me
    I made you all love me
    Now I'm torn into pieces
    Ripped apart by the jaws of love
    How could I have done this?
    I should just crush myself
    With all my strength
    Crush myself
    Cuddling on a cow
    Dreams don't exist
    The pain thats there when your not around
    All different yet all the same
    My heart can't take this anymore
    Who would have thought
    Dying from being loved too much
    Oh the pain
    Oh sorrow
    Let me die alone
    The pain of loosing you
    Is too much to bear
    Just let me die

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    Re: Torn

    When I read this... It adds to my illusions of sorrow...
    Can I request you something...? Can you put this line in your poem for me...

    ~I know I hurt you so bad,
    And it breaks your heart...
    It's not my intension to make you suffer...
    But now, I'm crawling back to you...

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    Re: Torn

    whoa! its.... whoa! its good! it made me think of the way i see pain. good job!!
    "... And then, a ray of light pierced the darkness. The light turned into a figure of a person who was followed by a fairy, and also held the spirit of the forest..."



    thats great!! thank you!!


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    Re: Torn

    Sorry I cant really put that line in there.
    Cause its not quite the situation everyone thinks it is

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    Re: Torn

    I see... This poem only tackles about someone whom suffers... But he/she never intends to come back... That's okay... It's only my request... Thank you anyways... I really appreciate your work...

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