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    Trapped

    Dazed and confused
    Floating in a sea of numbness
    I try to open my eyes
    But they feel like heavy curtains of steel
    Awareness is here
    And yet it’s not
    Ensnared in an endless trail of nothingness
    Frozen in a continuous moment
    My heart beat races
    But I can’t move
    I am trapped


    When I wrote this I really didn't have any motive, honestly. Words just starting going through my mind and I just started writing or in this case typing.

    Don't ask why I suddenly decided to post one of my so-called poems. I'm not sure myself. It was more of an impulse if anything.

    Anyway, I hope you guys like it. I'll listen to any critics.

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    Re: Trapped

    Thats really good. I especially like the flow of the poem and the woed choice was perfect too. I love it! Good Job Brena.
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