Chiefblackhammer

Travesty

As the shells fall from my hands
The rain drenches still
Like tear drops from heaven
Their weight we can no longer feel

Praying they could wash us clean
Of this reached refuse
Forgiveness forever out of reach
How our purpose has become confused

Appalling is this site
Of humanity lost in its savagery
My brethren fall around me
Bound needlessly to this travesty

The piercing sounds will not fade
Nor the images dull from our eyes
As some give their all
Never allowed to say goodbye

To the ones they loved
Is the greatest tragedy
Yet those whose fault it is
Hide behind their amnesty

Tortuous it must be
Not knowing if we live or die
With each knock on the door
Our loved ones sit and cry

But bound we are
To this horrid task
In the name of Freedom?
Nay, tis genocide’s mask

And such is our travesty.
~BCM~

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Peach_follows

I almost hate to comment on this. Only because it seems like its too powerful to be followed by many words. Something that may even constitute a moment amoment of silence.

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None the less, I had to let it be known how much I appreciate seeing this here. It'd be nice to see more work of this callibur. So much meaning, and such a strong statement. Thanks for this.

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Chiefblackhammer

I really didn't get to go in the same direction as I had initially intended with this poem but was able to still capture a worth while meaning. If you are a war vet or family member there of there is some extra meaning in some of what was said but hopefully it can still speak to all those who read it without the mark of war on their lives.

@Peach, your words are very kind

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RayMe

Hmm darn.. @.@ this is powerful...has strong aura thx to them big boombastic words..
lol ^^ it's carefully done from what i see...nice rhyming by the way... ^^ good job...

Kudos for making it filled with powerful words and filled me with envy.. xD

Hmm... keep up the good work..and rarely seen ur poem... :/ i hope u make more...

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HolderOfTheDarkChalice

i love this poem my dad being a vet i can see why he nmever really talks about it
its been 34 years since he retired thats is when i was born , yet he really never
talks about it still, it gives me a insight on my dad i never really thought about
very awesome .

i love this pome a lot this poem really is great.

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gren

Beautiful, chief. Great use of language; it works well with your subject but isn't overdone. And I'm always a fan of ending with a single, powerful line. Kudos!

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