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    Re: A tribute to Kenshin Himura

    that was freaking awesome blade! dang dude, your tribute poems are getting better and better. Keep it up man.

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    Re: A tribute to Kenshin Himura

    gha-!!!! love it!!!!!!! >.< kenshin rocks my left sock!!!!!!

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    Re: A tribute to Kenshin Himura

    The poems give the anime justice! great work, had a beautiful flow and nice structure.
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    Re: A tribute to Kenshin Himura

    "The Darkness"

    I have become a demon,
    I have become Death's avatar.
    I am not soldier of war,
    I am the deliverer of Tenchu.
    They called me The Battousai,
    They fear the shadows and the night.
    I had smelled white plums
    And saw a beautiful maiden.
    Someone I thought I could never reach.

    Even in daylight they were not safe from me,
    Their deaths came quickly as the blood rained.
    But one bodyguard wouldn't die,
    Kiyosato was his I later found out.
    His will to live managed to scar me.
    I was just careless to killing him,
    But the wound wouldn't stop bleeding.
    It was just a old lady's tale that
    Kiyosato was holding a strong grude against me.
    A foolish tale that I ignored it,
    But everytime I killed,
    The wound would start bleeding again.

    The sake was tasteless when I drank it,
    The words my master had told rang in my head.
    I got up and walk into the raining night,
    A foolish assassin tries to kill me.
    More blood rains when I give him an ironic death,
    But she stood there covered in blood.
    I looked at her and she said to me,
    "You truly...make it rain blood"
    It was as if she hit me,
    I dropped the sword
    And caught her before she fell to the ground.
    I found out her name was Tomoe.
    She was to show me something I never experienced before.

    Yukishiro Tomoe is Kenshin's first wife.
    Katsura was the leader of the Choshu clan and was the one who hired Kenshin to be the assassin and eventually asking Kenshin to lend him his strength which leads Kenshin becoming the man slayer.

    Hope u enjoy it.
    Last edited by Blade X; May 07, 2006 at 10:36 AM.

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    Re: A tribute to Kenshin Himura

    Wow! ^_^ You did a great job again, Blade!!! Hey, I am jealous; you are getting better in every poem you compose (.^_^.), but you entertain me with your poems, so I happy to see you write more poems, buddy. Improvement is of the essence in getting much better than your previous self, and I am seeing that in you, so be glad! As to critic on this work of yours, I really have nothing to say, but I do want to bring to light that when I reading the beginning, the following part seemed a little disjunct or out of place:

    I had smelled white plums
    And saw a beautiful maiden.
    Someone I thought I could never reach.


    I would just ask you to find a smooth transition to connect this part to the rest of the poem. All in all, I love it, Blade. Keep it up, buddy. This poem marks the first part of the OVA disc: Trust. ^_^

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    Revised version

    "The Darkness"

    I have become a demon,
    I have become Death's avatar.
    I am not soldier of war,
    I am the deliverer of Tenchu.
    They called me The Battousai,
    They fear the shadows and the night.

    Even in daylight they were not safe from me,
    Their deaths came quickly as the blood rained.
    But one bodyguard wouldn't die,
    Kiyosato was his I later found out.
    His will to live managed to scar me.
    I was just careless to killing him,
    But the wound wouldn't stop bleeding.
    It was just a old lady's tale that
    Kiyosato was holding a strong grude against me.
    A foolish tale that I ignored it,
    But everytime I killed,
    The wound would start bleeding again.

    During my time I had smell something,
    White plums, a spring flower.
    I saw her, a beautiful young maiden.
    She was someone I could never touch,
    I walked past her and never thought of her again.

    The sake was tasteless when I drank it,
    The words my master had told rang in my head.
    I got up and walk into the raining night,
    A foolish assassin tried to kill me.
    More blood rains when I give him an ironic death,
    But she stood there covered in blood.
    I looked at her and she said to me,
    "You truly...make it rain blood"
    It was as if she hit me,
    I dropped the sword
    And caught her before she fell to the ground.
    I found out her name was Tomoe.
    She was to show me something I never experienced before.

    Well after my critic's advice, i decided to revise this quickly

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: A tribute to Kenshin Himura

    That was impressive i can give you that

    I live in the shadows and I am as fast as the speed of light, but I use my ability's to help people even though they fear me for who I am.

    A Brand new Theme song for all my friends who use to come to Ao and the People that still come's to Ao.
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    Re: A tribute to Kenshin Himura

    "The light is there"

    I brought Tomoe back to care for her,
    The owner is kind enough to let her stay and work.
    I saw her working around the Inn,
    I never had a chance to speak to her.
    Till I was sleeping and I had done what was second to nature,
    I had drawn my sword to her throat and pushed her away.
    The first woman to touch me since I was an assassin,
    I apologise and went away but she saw something in me.
    She knew I wasnt a cold hearted killer,
    She attempted to get closer to me.

    My employers had decided to set Kyoto ablaze,
    Katsura as always wanted make sure I was alright.
    Then he had ordered me to get out of Kyoto,
    To live a false life with Tomoe.
    We ran through the streets and then,
    The Wolves of Mibu had appeared.
    I told her to run while I fought them,
    But sha had said something which probaly was right.
    "No, I am your sheath and you are a drawn blade.
    I will protect you till the very end."
    I felt like my heart was warm again,
    I had felt strength like never before.
    I slayed them and led her through the carnage.

    Soon, after we had left Kyoto,
    We began to live our lives as a normal people,
    As husband and wife, a happy loving couple.
    This was something I began to fall into,
    She live by my side and I helped her.
    We had actually began to love each other.
    Seasons came and went but we remained,
    We had revieced word that Katsura had disappeared,
    And the revoluntion was beginning to slow down.
    It would seem that the world had begin to slow,
    For us to live and love each other.

    Enishi Yukishiro, Tomoe's younger brother had visited us,
    I thought nothing of it since he was just her brother.
    I had let them talked while I worked in the garden,
    He lefted his sister with a smiling face.
    We had continued to live our lives peacefully,
    Then we made love to each other.
    Her body was so beautifully pale and smooth,
    It was like I was making forbidden love.
    It had seemed that there was a price to pay,
    My wound had started bleeding again.
    She was the one that I had killed her love.
    I didnt know what to do,
    But to go after her to seek an answer.
    Somewhere, she had the answers I seeked.
    I took up my sword again and the memories came flooding back
    Like a tidal wave of blood, consuming me.

    Enishi is Tomoe's brother who we see in the OVAs. Anyway enjoy it ppl
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    Last edited by Blade X; May 09, 2006 at 12:19 PM. Reason: Automerged Doublepost

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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