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    two brothers

    me and my brother dark wolf put this one together so please comment

    (hellknight and dark wolf)
    no matter how many nights and days
    he always sits down and prays
    its the only thing he ever says
    he always love these ways

    (DW) hey little brother where you been?
    you have going to church since you were ten

    (HK) brother please just let me leave
    all i want to do is grieve

    (DW) you been sad ever since mother died
    i know that because you always cried

    (HK) at least she was sent above
    floating like a turtle dove

    (DW) please leave it in the past
    your memory wont long that last

    (HK) she's our mother, and i'll always remember
    doenst matter how long it takes, as long its forever

    (DW) as long she's our mother in our heart and mind
    lets get some special flowers the best we can find

    (hellknight and darkwolf)
    no matter how many nights and days
    he always sits down and prays
    it the only thing he ever says
    he always love these ways

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    Re: two brothers

    oh wow i like this poem its in a different style and i like it its really different
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    Re: two brothers

    It is different, i liked it aswell. Will you try another poem this way??

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    Re: two brothers

    it's different it's hot i like uniqueness. but i donty like your brother. he can................................

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    Re: two brothers

    o thanks everyone and um me and my brother are gonna make another one so get ready to read it by tommorrow lol

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    Re: two brothers

    Punctuation and capitalization is the way to go. I think it adds a certain 'thing' to poems. In fact, it would have made this poem discernable.
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    Re: two brothers

    Sorry i was late to reply but that was awesome Helly it was really awesome, i hope you and your bro do more combanation poems
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    Re: two brothers

    thanks everyone, and thanks shippy lol i'll try to keep this up if i can

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