Thanks for your concern. I did unexpectedly better, scoring an average of Bs, cept for my history, which I don't really have to worry about...
Glad that I'm on the right track![]()
I stand on the ledge
Of a dark abyss
Life is uncertain
Will I survive?
Will I overcome the hurdles?
That has been set for me?
Can I take the society’s pressure?
Can I take my family’s expectations?
Will my siblings overtake me…?
Will I lose my place as a Crescentian?
Will I be disgraced?
A fallen Crescent?
Will I shame my family?
Is it my destiny?
Or did I have a choice?
Why am I uncertain?
Did I not have a year to contemplate?
Will my future be bleak?
Or will it shine out from others?
Can I bring hope to those
Who are in my grim situation?
Will I break free?
Of the clutches of my evil side?
Will I be able to concentrate?
Will I be able to fight back?
So little time
So much to learn
How will I cope?
Who should I turn to?
What other options do I have
Should I fail?
I shuffle closer to my doom
Surely
Many mock me
I have lost my title as a leader
I am nothing
Merely a follower
Cold
Unfeeling
Thoughtless
Mindless
Cast out from the elite circle
A loser
Will I be able to pull together?
To face my fears
To face those who scorn me
To fight back
To show my spirit
To never give up?
I face uncertainties
It seems that I am
Destined to be a fallen star
Can a fallen
Fly back up?
To the glory it once enjoyed?
Can a fallen star
Shine out from the elite?
Some may have
But will this near-fallen
Achieve it?
Before it is too late to amend?
This Crescent
Has understood
This Crescent
Wishes to repent
Will this Crescent
Be given the chance?
Will she continue
To see the light?
Life is full of uncertainties
So little choices
What other options
Does a near-fallen have
Now that it is so near
To its downfall…
I wrote this... like two-three months ago, when I was near failing for all my subjects, cept english. So if I failed, I would have been bumped out of school. The reference to Crescent is because my school is called Crescent, so yeah. And because my sister did much better than me academically, I was really freaked out at that point of time. So yeah, hope someone can give me good comments so that I can brush up on my writing skills. And this isn't the original, I'm not sure if it will be offensive to anyone at all
Thanks for your concern. I did unexpectedly better, scoring an average of Bs, cept for my history, which I don't really have to worry about...
Glad that I'm on the right track![]()
Even though your near fallen,
Your skills lifts you up without wings at all...
I guess the brilliant star of yours,
Can't be with this heaven together...
Even if its not yours mainly, this is really a great one...
Perhaps you would care to define what you mean that it is mainly not mine...?Originally posted by SousukeSagara
Even if its not yours mainly, this is really a great one...
Edited : I wrote the first one. But I changed it slightly, its almost the same, but it had reference to God, and I'm not sure what., since I haven't had time to re-read my poems. So yeah, I can post up my original if you want, but I doubt it is as good. It's a bit like raw power. Strong but not nice if not controlled...
I can understand the first to lines, but, the next two, is "this heaven" refering to you? If I interpret the... poem my way, you had got to be joking... right...?Originally posted by SousukeSagara
Even though your near fallen,
Your skills lifts you up without wings at all...
I guess the brilliant star of yours,
Can't be with this heaven together...
A great poem that strucked something inside me...*ouchee* I really love reading poems..me glad u didnt lose hope and is still holding on.
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