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    Uncertainties

    I stand on the ledge
    Of a dark abyss
    Life is uncertain
    Will I survive?
    Will I overcome the hurdles?
    That has been set for me?

    Can I take the society’s pressure?
    Can I take my family’s expectations?
    Will my siblings overtake me…?
    Will I lose my place as a Crescentian?

    Will I be disgraced?
    A fallen Crescent?
    Will I shame my family?

    Is it my destiny?
    Or did I have a choice?
    Why am I uncertain?
    Did I not have a year to contemplate?

    Will my future be bleak?
    Or will it shine out from others?
    Can I bring hope to those
    Who are in my grim situation?

    Will I break free?
    Of the clutches of my evil side?

    Will I be able to concentrate?
    Will I be able to fight back?
    So little time
    So much to learn
    How will I cope?

    Who should I turn to?
    What other options do I have
    Should I fail?

    I shuffle closer to my doom
    Surely
    Many mock me
    I have lost my title as a leader
    I am nothing
    Merely a follower

    Cold
    Unfeeling
    Thoughtless
    Mindless
    Cast out from the elite circle
    A loser

    Will I be able to pull together?
    To face my fears
    To face those who scorn me
    To fight back
    To show my spirit
    To never give up?

    I face uncertainties
    It seems that I am
    Destined to be a fallen star

    Can a fallen
    Fly back up?
    To the glory it once enjoyed?

    Can a fallen star
    Shine out from the elite?
    Some may have
    But will this near-fallen
    Achieve it?
    Before it is too late to amend?


    This Crescent
    Has understood

    This Crescent
    Wishes to repent
    Will this Crescent
    Be given the chance?

    Will she continue
    To see the light?

    Life is full of uncertainties
    So little choices
    What other options
    Does a near-fallen have
    Now that it is so near
    To its downfall…


    I wrote this... like two-three months ago, when I was near failing for all my subjects, cept english. So if I failed, I would have been bumped out of school. The reference to Crescent is because my school is called Crescent, so yeah. And because my sister did much better than me academically, I was really freaked out at that point of time. So yeah, hope someone can give me good comments so that I can brush up on my writing skills. And this isn't the original, I'm not sure if it will be offensive to anyone at all

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    Re: Uncertainties

    Thanks for your concern. I did unexpectedly better, scoring an average of Bs, cept for my history, which I don't really have to worry about...
    Glad that I'm on the right track

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    Re: Uncertainties

    Even though your near fallen,
    Your skills lifts you up without wings at all...
    I guess the brilliant star of yours,
    Can't be with this heaven together...

    Even if its not yours mainly, this is really a great one...

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    Re: Uncertainties

    Originally posted by SousukeSagara
    Even if its not yours mainly, this is really a great one...
    Perhaps you would care to define what you mean that it is mainly not mine...?
    Edited : I wrote the first one. But I changed it slightly, its almost the same, but it had reference to God, and I'm not sure what., since I haven't had time to re-read my poems. So yeah, I can post up my original if you want, but I doubt it is as good. It's a bit like raw power. Strong but not nice if not controlled...

    Originally posted by SousukeSagara
    Even though your near fallen,
    Your skills lifts you up without wings at all...
    I guess the brilliant star of yours,
    Can't be with this heaven together...
    I can understand the first to lines, but, the next two, is "this heaven" refering to you? If I interpret the... poem my way, you had got to be joking... right...?

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    Re: Uncertainties

    A great poem that strucked something inside me...*ouchee* I really love reading poems..me glad u didnt lose hope and is still holding on.

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