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    Unfathomable

    Watching in disbelief as events unfold
    Unable to stop what’s already set into motion
    Fear, frustration, and helplessness grips you
    Fighting it now is all but lost

    How could things have spiraled this far
    Nothing seems to make since anymore
    Seeing things that don’t add up
    Unsure what to do, think, or even say

    Someone’s trust held close to your heart
    Dare you speak of what you can see
    Keeping silent can be the same as the sin
    Like the acts you question happening before you

    The cost of loyalty is betrayal
    Punishment is dealt out by those trusted
    Is it something that you risk

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    Re: Unfathomable

    Very good poem fai. It makes alot sense and sounds alot like how I felt once my marriage fell apart. I can't wait to see your next one.
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    Re: Unfathomable

    I really enjoyed it...It takes alot to find a person now days who knows how to write good poetry ^.^

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    Re: Unfathomable

    Very nice peom. While reading it I thought of Yuna from FF10 and FF10-2 and how she felt as her story went one. I hope that you will do a "happy" poem soon.
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    Re: Unfathomable

    Quote Originally Posted by Dragon Born View Post
    Very nice peom. While reading it I thought of Yuna from FF10 and FF10-2 and how she felt as her story went one. I hope that you will do a "happy" poem soon.
    You are totally right I can see Yuna in the poem too. You're really good at looking into things.

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    Re: Unfathomable

    Very good poem fire! I like the second and third part of your poem. I understand thoes two sections and been through them myself. I know you are a great writer too. I can't wait to see that is next to come out from you.

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